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Oct 05, 2009
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Flawed
When did the flaw seed itself?Conception,Birth,When first told no!From what depthsDid its ugly face show.Newborn as perfect?Universal aweBut was that birthThe very flaw. Growing years tumble byBeing told ‘shut up’No answers to questioned why’sSullen teenagersWith tears emergingFor adulthood they are yearningNot understanding whyBelief in themselves An internal lie Cracks appear as time goes byAge can’t conceal itThe flesh creeps backOn dog eyed sacsThe shrinking frameReveals the cracksThe outer body decay. Within,The light of life is dulledThe light of death beckonsTo make whole againYet!So many truths I want to getPleasures I’ve still to knowI pull away too scared to go With great skillI fill my cracksMy surface seeming smoothForward into life againI portray my happy mood.
— seabhac, Oct 05, 2009
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Ink Dragon
16 years 8 months ago
Hi Seabhac,
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Hi NIna
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Liz
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Good one Cat
Bonitaj
16 years 8 months ago
loved your method
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Thanks Bonita j
lyz
16 years 8 months ago
Dear seabhac
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Hi Lyz
hugo la rosa
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Seabhac:
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Ah Hugo
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Tired confusion
bjp
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Elizabeth,
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Brian