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loved
loved
Oct 04, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Just tomorrow

 Just Tomorrow

Tomorrow when you rise

You will be red in the face,

For your silence

What’s this so much grace?

Yet my love

For you has shallowed down

For you now I

Neither pine nor frown,

But in my heart

You will for ever stay

You are an egoist

I knew

From the very first day

 

You and I both lose friends

That’s okay

Come my dear one

Come along side me

Once more if you may.

Now it’s your take

Let silence over take

It’ll be your loss

So do not mistake

My love is pure

A lover’s love

Not of sex

That’s for sure.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

— loved, Oct 04, 2009

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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Beautiful

Very nice read and one a great play on words. Well done. Love Lyz. XX
loved

loved

16 years 8 months ago

views

ma'am Have you read any more and what do u think about my works too. ur great thanx
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 8 months ago

Loved...

This poem was only ok for me and I'll tell you why, it does have potential, but... some of the sentences are broken up and in turn break the flow... the use of caps at the start of every line also interrupts, stumbles the read along with some forced rhyming... but it could all be fixed and you could have a very good poem in the end... just one man's opinion... over take... overtake what's this so much grace (didn't understand where you were going with this) Richard
loved

loved

16 years 8 months ago

styles

i have found all sites are whimisical some want caps some dont so i carry on the way i can thanks ur kind
loved

loved

16 years 3 months ago

hello sir

It seems ur annoyed at my work. Please do help and give ur comments on this one Thanks Come Let's Talk OK You are welcome to talk with me As no one listens to me, We are sailing the same boat The oars are a single pair Sometimes you’ll row I'll take over Whenever But don’t ask me to row, As I will be busy talking all alone, Your ears would be listening, As you shall be rowing, So come and talk to me. Are you listening? LOVED
loved

loved

16 years 6 months ago

poem for u

I arrive I arrive, my love So far I was waiting for you Now I know you do not want With me to anything do I am awaiting my love As I always do Wherever you may be I shall remember you. You were once the cynosure Of my eyes now no more Where on this earth Can you find anyone? Whose eyes are like mine? Please do say Come into my life again If you wish you may