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Bearing Witness

I've shared a sadness
that was leagues away,
breaking my recess
cannot grasp the day

Pouring through fingers
to puddle the floor,
my heart seeps tears
as valves close doors

Bodies did crumble
with the pain of grief,
Wailing in mime
in the search for relief

Witnessing a world
as it crumbles away,
My mind burns to cinders
as it remembers this Day

The pit in my stomach
was dug in deep,
the pain in my chest
wouldn't give when I weep

Illusions in mind
start to make folds,
misery had found
a place to grab hold

A formidable statue
till guard stood down,
dwelling with sadness
being strength with a frown

Mask drops down
to release control,
Falling to pieces
as tears fill the mold

Crying for friends
in the mirror of sorrow,
weighted in dampness
that wont wait for tomorrow

— Seren, Oct 04, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Little Sister

I am at a complete loss for anything intelligent, or otherwise to say. At this point, all I have is love in my heart and a multitude of tears. Love you always, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Cat

This ones incredibley sad and I know it ... I wrote it for a friend who had experienced a terrible loss ... this is how I felt and the witness is me this time ... I was so overcome with their grief I couldnt sleep ... and got up at dawn and wrote this, a couple of days ago ... I just wanted them to know that hearts out here in this big harsh world cried with them ... and I did ... thanks for your support your a special woman,always inspire me and never more so lately ... thank you for that (huggles) love and huggest bugs Jayne x x x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 8 months ago

Besutiful

This is very deep Jayne, I loved it and wanted to look away but could not. There was one line I had a problem with being strength with a frown Can you explain the context of this and maybe it will make it clearer to me. Keep on writing... Hugs Liz
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Liz

IN this poem the witness is me ... and the grief was anothers not my own ... I am one of those people who will remain stoical in front of other people ... very rarely cry in front of people though lol I am getting older and soft it happens more these days ... but the being strength with a frown IS me lol ... apparently I frown when I am trying to control myself(I have been told) and in that stanza I wanted the feeling of being resolute in standing with my friend to help bear their grief with them ... and being me in real life I would frown ... So I hope that explained it for you hun thanks for the read and the comment much appreciated love and huggest bugs Jayne x x x x
L

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

No Comment

Except, I bear witness to a friend indeed, Who bears witness to a friend in need. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Lyz

You gone and made me leak again, here I was saying I never cry ...Lyz your a wonderful person and I am soooo glad (I know I have said this before but I have to say it again)that Jade got you to join ... I couldnt imagine neopoet without you now ... and while I am gone you can hold the aussie flag high for me, and wave it proud :) ... I will be in newcastle for a while so there will be plenty of time to meet up you can come visit me :P and you can fill me in on everything I am missing here ... love and huggest bugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Cmon Aussie Cmon

Oy, Oy Oy, no tears from a true blue. You have a wonderful heart and you should put that frown back on your face and be strong, girly. lol. I cant wait to see you. Gos Gos Gos. Love to you and all. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

AUSSIE AUSSIE AUSSIE … OI

AUSSIE AUSSIE AUSSIE ... OI OI OI !!!! ... had an early night last night so I havent been able to read anything last night or today will be reading later to see what you have been up to ... I need to readddddd ... its been LOL one hell of a morning need to calm down, But I have to go to the docters etc today so wont be reading till later ... take care huni thanks for you message made me smile :D and no tears today lol Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Jayne:

A very sentimental piece of poetry, and elegy of the first kind. Thank you for sharing your gift. "Wailing in mime in a search for relief, "Witnessing a world as it crumbles away." Really beautiful lines! Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Hugo

This one came from nowhere, just wrote itself I was very upset for a friend and I wrote this one morning(early) I have already sent it to them and they were touched ... I hope they are feeling better, thankyou for your kind words they mean so much to me love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x