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Blunt Force Trauma (Why?) -The death of my beloved brother Jeremiah Aug 30th 09-

A dam of tears is opened

from the great pain of a family

an outcry shakes the very heavens

angels feet feel the vibrations,

 

No fare was paid

when the boatman came with his ugliest of faces

hidden in hooded darkness is a sinister smile

and elation is seen in his flaming eyes,

 

Slowly and silently

like the flying rocks of Death Valley

not a witness was present

when the reaper came knocking,

 

Life poured out in all its scarlet color

a pool was made on shinny parquet

not even tears could wash it away

an image that will never be erases,

 

No information,

only that death surely came

twelve hours later on a hospital bed

while sweet life made its escape,

 

No prints, no physical evidence

not even science

could answer the question

but what is death without explanation,

 

Cancer, Emphysema, and Aids

they all have been answered

when life makes its departure

then why doesn’t this,

 

The cold hand of revenge has touched my very soul

no vengeance is found when not a single person knows

but what is revenge to a soul that is loss

can vendettas be paid to ceremonial stones

 

The love in my heart is replaced with this pain

that fills up my days in this new empty space

no answers are found that might give me Karma

from why such a death from Blunt Force Trauma?    



— Eduardo Cruz, Oct 02, 2009

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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bjp

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Eduardo,

I just wanted to provide my condolences on the death of your brother, Jeremiah. There is shock and so much uncertainty and pain from unexpected death. Please accept my thoughts on your behalf. Brian
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Eddie

I leave my mark in respect you know how I feel ... with all our love and sympathy Jayne, Ken(Snake) and family x x x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Eddie

I am so sorry for what has happened to your family with the senseless loss of your brother. I can only guess how you must be feeling. You have my deepest condolences. These lines really touched me: The love in my heart is replaced with this pain that fills up my days in this new empty space no answers are found that might give me Karma from why such a death from Blunt Force Trauma? Always, Cat
Rett

Rett

16 years 8 months ago

My friend

My deepest sympathy and understanding. I feel your pain and know your want for vengeance. Senseless violence is everywhere and it is just that, senseless! So sorry to hear of what happened. Respectfully, Rett: "When I was born I was so surprised I didn't talk for a year and a half." Gracie Allen
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 8 months ago

My deepest thank you

to all of you my friends! I'm posting a poem that I wrote in anger at God (Myth, Fairytale, and Reality) because I feel as if I've been robbed. He was younger then I, only 50yrs. old. Rett they say that revenge is best served cold. I disagree, revenge is best in the white burning heat that one can control. It's done, and am I better for it I think not, but do I feel better yes! Sometimes things do not feel right and yet they must be done. again thank you all!!! PS tears came to my eyes in answering your comments, I don't think this will go away so easily.