Seren

Oct 02, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Black Magic (Part 1)

A bubble of magic
escaped the divine,
popping to twist
a devil from time

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All through our days
warlocks have lived
with the casting of spells
and a nature to give

Passing through veils
and wormholes in space,
they dwell with time
in serenity's grace

Defending dragons
from knights with swords,
with a wave of hands
and utterance of words

Preparing potions
that mend broken parts,
making a rainbow
to shine hope to heart

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But as the dark
is mirror to day,
evil does thrive
crushing his way

Creeping through swamps
and sitting in parks,
he looks quite normal
but that's a farce

With a twitch of a lobe
he could take off your head
with a twist of his cane
you will wish you were dead

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So till next time
take some advice,
don't walk the parks
or his charm may entice

— Seren, Oct 02, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Jayne

You should hire that Magician to protect your home, I bet he would be better than any home protection device! (You are a bit of a Magician, yourself, you know.) My favorite lines are: Defending dragons from knights with swords, with a wave of hands and utterance of words Preparing potions that mend broken parts, making a rainbow to shine hope to heart I think you already know how much I love your fantasy writes. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Cat

Thanks so much for the read and the comment hun,I think you maybe the only one that likes my fantasy writes sometimes,but thats good enough for me .. I always say just one read and I am happy,easy pleased vegemite me(huggles) love and higgest bugs Jayne :)

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Ha Ha! Found Ya.

Stanza 7, typo, hes, rid the s, last Stanza, first line, So until. There done and done. Great poem, I love it. You clever little vegemite. Worth the wait but I had to go way back to find you. I want a man like him, lol, p.s. Cant wait for Part 2. Very much like, love to all. XX

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Lyz

Hun you dont have to go through stream to find me up the top of the page there is a friends tab click on that and it will bring up all your friends latest work lol ... saves time if your looking lol anyway glad you liked this one its going to be four parts in all and the first three are nearly done but I wont be putting them on, one after the other I am going to submit one a week and try and get all the poetry I have finished on the net then when the time comes it will be easier to work on ... thanks as always for the read and comment take care love and higgest bugs to you and yours Jayne x x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Seren:

I guess this is a Hallowen poem, and as always is well written. It amazes me the way you rhyme these poems of yours, words seem to obey you like magic. Five stars! Sincerely, Hugo

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Hugo

Lately I have felt I am lacking in spark ... so your comments are always appreciated thanks for the lovely words they always brighten my nights or days love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Sparks fly...

from the swords of evil knights as they strike the scales of your good dragons. But there have to be evil dragons for us knights of the realm to slay. The dark spectres of evilness must be driven from the land. Dragons of light, join forces with wizards robed in beams of goodness, carrying hope as a staff. Together, we will purge the land of their darkness. ~ Sir Gee

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Gee

I have been waiting for you to find this one , this is the one or series you inspired me to write something you said a couple of weeks ago,made me think,and black magic came out of it ... thanks for the inspiration ... I believe the next two are some of the best poetry I have writen but I am still fiddling and editing,but I am going to put the last one on the night of my dads 80th birthday which is halloween :) celebrating with a bang this year .. lol love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x

press

16 years 8 months ago

JC

First of all you know how I feel about you. So I will ask you a question ? only because I have been receiving a favorable rating in my latest poems. But my last poem , I posted was ripped apart by [Richard comments on my grammar & Tonya's comments on my flow].I would have to say that their comments gave me a gilt of balance . I also , like you begin to question my spark [ but more like the stars ]. I'm sorry JC I just couldn't trust them .Question JC do you trust the stars & comments . You are a superstar everybody reads and comments on your poetry [that's just how it is JC]. But are you happy with with your progress do you think you are evolving I know JC here comes Press with these comments . But it's out of love Press

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Press

As with any system there are flaws but the system we have now ? is much fairer more poems get in spotlight and thats a good thing the light should be shared and the favourite of the minute (cause thats what they are) ... can shine ... but then we all write our hearts some of us are here to improve our art, some of us are here to share our art, and some to do both ... round the end of the month I will be going away for a couple of months due to health reasons but I will be back ... and I hope to see you still round posting and improving ... little steps first my friend the rest will fall in place and relax you are too tense sometimes and I can feel it from oceans away lol thats said with love huni as to evolving we all get better and take one step forward to take two backwards ... I still write shit ... I have a folder with over 500 poems that will never see the light of day LOL because they are shit !! evolving can be a different process for all of us and I am no different ... and your new to this as I am ... I expect you to be way ahead of where you are now when I get back ... hope that answered your questions and I will be round in a little while reading will have a look at the poem your talking about I havent been round much this week love and hugs Jayne x x