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Pieces of Rimbaud at 20



                                                                                                1.

                        The words I wanted to use were washed away in white enamel by the genies of a bad conscience needing relief.
                        Quietly, each sheath was given flight by ruined alchemy, spoiled magic.  When I raised the green-lit bottle to
                        my lips nothing is fluid but cold bodies adorned with mortar flowers, strange petunias maligned with itchy
                        lobes, each with their own special agenda, fluorescent and filthy!!    The taste is not, is simply numb.



                                                                                                  2.

                      There is a ceiling in this wretch of a hotel that my poor brother, Verlaine, has chosen for our abode--far too
                      high class for me.  Committing it to memory, it becomes cracked and flaky just in proportion to the aging of
                      my face, the caulk ravaged slowly.  I am now 60 years old, burning away in Africa, mercury bubbles shooting 
                      through marble shafts in my wretched brain!



                                                                                                     3.

                     I need no cities to feel at home.  Broken windows, stabs at my failed heart, the ruin of this Paris dump happen
                     in smooth funhouse cycles within me.  Not above, but near the chilly nape of my invisibly receding hairline,  I, 
                     who thought myself a Voyant, an angel, above all morality!!!  I grow old as the rainbow blade reflects the number
                     of hairs counted on my head.      


                                                                                                     Merdre.

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Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear GB

I have heard of Arthur Rimbaud and Paul Verlaine but havent read much of their stuff your poem has piqued my interest will go and have a read ... great work ... :) my favoutite lines are these I need no cities to feel at home. Broken windows, stabs at my failed heart, the ruin of this Paris dump happen in smooth funhouse cycles within me My mum is french,I long to visit my other homeland ... take care Kind regards love Jayne x x
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Idlemindwondering

16 years 7 months ago

I like it

The voice is very consistent and melancholy; each vignette carries the read easily to the next stage of life without any fragmented feel or jump. I lack knowledge of the subject but am very intrigued and glad to have read this. best wishes ken
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bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear GB,

There is a great deal here that makes me take notice. The first stanza really works for me until the last line. I find the tease, "The taste in not", uninteresting for whatever reason, although I think there may need to be more words than, "The taste is numb." The second stanza is also very good. In the third stanza, you may wish to replace "Broken windows, stabs..." with "Broken windows, stab...". And the final line, before "Merdre", seems to make simple vanity the main issue of the poem, which I don't think is either accurate or comfortable. Still, a very interesting outing. Brian
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Quillsvein1

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you all

Seren, Idle and Brian for the constructive criticsm. I mostly intended "stabs at my failed heart" as a reference to one of Rimbaud's lesser known poems, "Stolen Heart", which was only given a proper translation recently by Wyatt Mason. The subject of the prose poem pieces must of necessity be vain to an extent--Arthur Rimbaud was probably one of the most vain, if massively talented, poets to ever live. And he never made anyone comfortable, shock them of out of complacency; indeed, reading a poem by Rimbaud is akin to getting verbal cold water thrown all over you. Still, I see what you mean to an extent. Thank you! GB