Devouring Shadows

Finally. I love reading your writes and this is really good. Not ur usual and I still enjoyed. Congrats to u as well. You got me on ur ending, brilliant. It is terrible, a lot of gang members are only children. Well done, Love Lyz. XX

Powerful write Cat ... Sorry I missed this one till now have been busy getting ready to come home today,this is sadly a part of life thats present in every country to some degree ... we have drive by shootings here in the city and sometimes the country now ...we used to watch this on our TV screens and now it happens on our streets ... great write and I love the ending brilliant ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

I like the sharp sentences, the language cuts through the night vividly, to cover it all up in shadows again. So transient, but repeated so often, that its gruesome reality seems permanent. Sincerely, Hugo

enda, patrick collins. hi cat different to be sure , i luv the title , i dont know much about the theme sad but true i guess ,,,,,zig

I liked this one a lot. Sirens and gunshot painted into dark. I got a very real sense of there, in that windowless room. I find 'member' by itself to open up a little more; a member of a city's entity, be it a gangster, victim, family, rich, poor etc. Just a thought. A great write, Cat Nice line; Shrill siren screaming Breaks the night Into tiny Fragmented pieces Yours, Espen

I was, at first, taken a little aback because of the many line breaks, but after reading the whole poem I now feel that they illustrate the fragmentation you are writing about. I must say I don't like gang-banger any more than member. This is a little trouble spot, and I regret to say I cannot offer a suitable alternative. It's a tricky line, hope you will find a solution. Yours, ~Nina

Heya Cat, Didn't know what to expect when i came to grace your pages... but I was surprised and impressed at the same time! The rolling descritives are great in the narrative style, like a story teller unfolding the scene as it happens... but the last few lines are just killers for me because it lands rough justice on those who actually deserve it! You have really penned a great atmospheric and true to life styled poem here... i am sure many could relate to this. Excellent! Dale :)

Quite a disturbing "night observation" Cat, I enjoyed this poem, I cannot comment on the gamma, u know y Most enjoyable ray

as the darkness you describe. It is concise and quick and sharp---stacato, like the sound of the gun shots. 'No window present To mar the blackness. That is like the lack of light in the midst of evil. The poem gives the sense of hopelessness where gang fights perpetuate themselves. Good work. Yours, Deelilah

quality poem. best wishes conor

turn down the brightness of self worlds and hear the fragmented bursts from the outer a great social pen writes and I read and listen thank you