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UNDERNEATH THE GLAZED DOME

From the valleys to the peaks
shaped by the ebb and flow
of H2o
Gravity feed it runs through
the land with out it soil turns
to sand .

Filtered by the rock and to
the beach we do flock
To gaze out on and feel the
breeze that rides the waves
this gives life a home .

— ziggy, Sep 29, 2009

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Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Water

In some places of the world it is flooding and in others we have people and land desperate for rain. I fear this great imbalance. Great poem, here, Edd. My favorite lines are: Filtered by the rock and to the beach we do flock To gaze out on and feel the breeze that rides the waves this gives life a home I thought the very last line was unnecessary, but please don't remove it until you get more feedback, because it may just be me. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

water

enda, patrick collins. hi cat this one was an efford to write a poem with out mentioning its title the last line was sort of making it a world wide thought of it i never saw it like that but you might be right thanks as always , it just felf unfinished when i spoke it out to my self as you said we will see but you are more than likely right lol ziggy

Kailashana

16 years 8 months ago

Perhaps, *Underneath the

Perhaps, *Underneath the Glazed Dome* would work as a title, ziggy. Water is the essence of life, perhaps the end *I am not alone*.... the wave returns to sea. ~A

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

hi

enda, patrick collins. many thanks i might use that as a title

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

ooooh

I really like that as the title! Excellent! Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

LOL

enda, patrick collins. HI CAT IS NOT A BAD ONE , A SORT OF COMPROMISE BETWEEN BOTH OF THE COMMENTS , MANY THANKS 4 THE *****

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

LOL

enda, patrick collins. HI CAT IS NOT A BAD ONE , A SORT OF COMPROMISE BETWEEN BOTH OF THE COMMENTS , MANY THANKS 4 THE ***** can i ask the cat in the pic whats its name as i love moggys and ziggy was a cat too , lol

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

LOL

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

sure...

His name is Beauregard but we call him Beau for short. (and Bo-peepers, Bo-diddly, Boba-fet as in Star Wars, and Bo-jangles.) He is one of four kitties that run my life, lol! Thanks for asking! Always, Cat

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

I like it

Dear Ziggy, this is really good and I am glad to see other sides of your writes lately and what an eye catching title. I see what Cat means with the last line but I read it with a pause between the second last line and it sounded better, to me. I enjoyed it. Great write my friend. Love from Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Ziggy

It all been said before me and eloquently water is life on earth ... wonderful write and perspective love and hugs Jayne :)

weirdelf-test

16 years 8 months ago

ah, the Irish are always the bravest in verse

you are not afraid to use science and spirit together, terrific profound verse. kind regards, Jean, meow, bite, purr, yowl and perfect body language express all

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

hi there

enda, patrick collins. i was not aware about that in us irish maybe i am to close to see that many thanks meow i do sometimes put science and spirit together well picked out like in my other one creation , i never thought this would get any replys shows wat i know lol , i will catch up with your work later today got to scat like a cat not ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy

weirdelf-test

16 years 8 months ago

call me jean

and though born in Aussie am Irish to the bone. We are treated as jokes, as many oppressed people are, but our language, whether gaelic or expressed in english, is the most beautiful language. A wee thing you might not know, since Ireland was neutral during both world wars many scientists took refuge there. We have all that makes us human, languange, science and working on compassion, kind regards, Jean, meow, bite, purr, yowl and perfect body language express all

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

THE IRISH

enda, patrick collins. cead mile failta rioth Eanna o coilean is ainm dom . hi , i know all about the irish neutrality jean and the refuge that was taken i never came across an oppressed irish person not here anyway , take care chat soon ,,,,,,, slan leath agus go nèiri on bother leath ,,,,,,

Hooded Stranger

16 years 8 months ago

Mars

In keeping with our 'space' conversation, this could be about Mars, many millions of years ago?, particularly the first verse. It is suggested that there were glass domes on Mars where an ancient alien civilisation lived, and they have found evidence of similar domes on the moon. Great write, short, but actually enough to give the reader an image and feel of the topic. Good job my friend, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Proprietress o…

16 years 7 months ago

the second and third

lines are killer, Ziggy, my heart got all fluttery when I read them. I absolutely love their rhythm! I find the rest of the stanza a bit hard to read though but I suppose it was meant to be that way so as to make us concentrate. :) wonderful! your Proprietress

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

hi again

enda, patrick collins. this was just a quick little one about water if i think of a line to start a piece i usually try to finish it there and then in case it leaves me cheers , im off to post another then read yours