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The Most Beautiful Jack o Latern

On All Hallows Eve, 
A long long time time ago
There was a tiny jack o lantern,
Whose candle refuse to glow
Every time the big ones lit it
They could not get a flame
And the poor little jack o lantern
Would drop his face in shame
The other jacks made fun of him
They told him he was a loss
And the only thing he was good for
Was the rotten pumpkin toss
his mother told him not listen
"I love you just how you are"
"And no matter  what they say,
You are my little shinning star."
He looked into his mother's eyes
And  he felt the pain no more
As a matter of fact, in his heart
The joy began to soar 
He realized  he needed no candle
To brighten his toothy grin
Because sometimes the brightest light
Is the one you have within

 

 






 

— greeneyes, Sep 29, 2009

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Country/Region: Colorado Springs Colorado

Favorite Poets: I love Dr. Suess! He is my favorite, I would love to write for children.

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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Yep

I agree, you have done a wonderful job on this poem and I believe the moral to be true for all. As for dear little Jack, his internal flame will never fade. Loved it very much. Love Lyz. XX
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 8 months ago

thank you reminds me of a

thank you reminds me of a little jack o latern of mine. my third son who people like to tease, I love him dearly and his light shines bright. Greeneyes
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

This would make a wonderful kids poem of hope .... nice work only have one niggle and thats with the 4th line 'whose candle refuse to glow' ... I think refuse could be refused and give it more flow ... love and hugs Jayne x x
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 8 months ago

thanks, i will do that when

thanks, i will do that when im not so tired, im working night shift at hosipital and im just beat, third day in a row, plus im in the process of moving! Elizabeth