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Candle Dance

Flames, we once danced to
hide in shadows of forgotten desires.
I slowly reach into warm depths
to re-ignite your wanton fire.

Shadows drift across your face
as liquid forms in pools.
Sensual aromas hang in wisps
as they permeate the room.

Flickering back and forth
to the tango of your rhythms,
I lightly touch dark corners
unexplored and once forbidden.

The waning flame exhausts itself,
no match for what we've captured.
As we meld into the esctasy
of our dance,
we call the rapture. . . . .
— Janice Pearce, Sep 28, 2009

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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Janice

Absolutely beautiful. Loved it all, and the last stanza, wow. Well done, I enjoyed this slightly erotic poem. Thanks, Love Lyz. XX
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 8 months ago

Candle Dance

Lyz, Thank you for reading and your feedback, always nice to hear from you! ___________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
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Dalton

16 years 7 months ago

To Janice Pearce

I would have liked to see the uneditted version of this poem. I love poetry about dancing and music, body's parting and then coming together like the whisper of an unuttered kiss. Mouths mere milimetres parted. Hope to read more. Respects Dalton.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

Candle Dance

Dalton, Thank you for comment on my poem, I appreciate the feedback! The original was posted February 28th 2008 the ending is different. If you like, you may backtrack to my profile and the date to see the differrences in this poem. ____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
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Idlemindwondering

16 years 7 months ago

very well presented

I like the intimacy of this picture; the rekindling of desires too often abandoned. I looked at the original for comparison and find that although the later version is more fluent and readable the differences are cosmetic to the base emotional value and massage. A worthy read ken
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

Candle Dance

Always good to see new faces! Thank you so much for your thoughts on this poem. I appreciate the feedback. I will have to get back to reading and posting more. Time constraints at work, but looking forwad to reading some of yours. ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

hello Janice

To be short and to the point: I loved this piece of sweet passion. Always, Cat
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

Candle Dance

As always, your thoughts appreciated! _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous