PRAYER TO ZEUS

   The rain falls steadily
a constant repetitive melody
Cascading down my window pane
the endless driving sheets of plain .

   I`ve thrown open the casement
and peer up through the day let`s
pray to ZEUS for a truce by summers
end , i`m no recluse i must repute.

Capitulate , now be true turn this gray
to blue let me see a rainbow arch , we
are asking this of you .

Eventually the clouds do part , children
running hand in hand skipping through
the puddles bland .

The fields are sodden rivers burst its banks
we prayed to ZEUS for this truce to lend this
                   helping hand ...

— ziggy, Sep 28, 2009

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Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Hey There!

I like this very much because of the rhyming, which I find charming. And because of the invoking of the ruler of the Gods of the Greek Pantheon. I'm a big fan of Mythology. I hope that you get your blue sky back soon. It is super windy here (forty miles an hour, I don't know what that equates to in klms) with gray sky. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

prayer to zeus

enda, patrick collins. hi cat i was about to pm you to see what you think as i value your comments , nice one i am delighted you like it , it has been half finished for a couple of weeks so am glad to have got back in the zone many thanks cat chat soon ,,,,,,,,,,,,

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

HEY ZIGGY!!!

Congratulations!!! Your poem went to Spotlight!!! I sure do hope you get to see it here! Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

prayer to zeus

enda, patrick collins. het there lyn , many thanks ya we had a summer of rain its only the last few weeks it stopped lol its like a different country when its sunny here but as we irish say it would be a great little country if only we could roof it , lol i had the first stanza wrote finished it to day and a new title nearly a new theme zeus was only thought up today , o if only we could send the rain away if you got as much of it as we do you might say same thats why its so green here chat soon many thanks for the comment and the *****`s ziggyyyyyyyyyyy

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Yo Ziggy

Yes, very good, I like. This did make me feel like I was the one watching. Quite Grand indeed, I wish it was that easy and get Zeus to help when we have too much. A pleasure to read. Well done with this one.Excellent Prayer. Lots of love from Lyz. XX

Hazeleyes

16 years 9 months ago

Prayer to Zeus

Really liked this one Ziggy. Keep up the good work.

Hooded Stranger

16 years 9 months ago

Artist

This one is like a painting, perfect brush strokes with layers of colour and all finished of with a splash of water. This is my favourite poem of yours I have read...so far. I would have 'in my dark and twisted opinion' changed the word 'plain' to 'pain'. Great writing as usual. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

ziggy

16 years 9 months ago

preyer to zeus

enda, patrick collins. hey you have been busy reading this eve , ya pane to pain i should of seen that comin lol , nice compliment my friend cheers i am so glad you read nice one ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zig i love yrs about the church , it has reminded since of a friends song that had a line that said " THE CHURCHS TURN RELIGON TO A PLASTIC AND FINANCIAL PARADE " ,,,,,,,,,NIT NIT

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