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Illusions of Grandeur

Standing on
the tip of the world,
watching the stars
as they swirl in whirls

Suddenly as if,
someone flipped a coin,
upside down
ass and ground joined

As life's slide-show
changed real fast,
the world ahead
was alone and vast

Confused and crying
wringing my hands,
screaming at heaven
like i don't give a damn

Ripping to shreds
the clothes on my back,
watching the ants
to uncover new tracks

Madness sets in
arid deserts call,
illusions of grandeur
come before the fall

Crawling through gravel
as scorpions crisscross,
Fearing nothing as
sanity's been lost

A shaking feeling
rattles my head,
"wake up honey
and go to bed"

— Seren, Sep 28, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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seabhac

seabhac

16 years 8 months ago

Lovely Jayne

My favourite was the sound on my tongue of as they swirl in whirls I had a bit of a problem with the second verse and although I love the line 'ass and ground joined' on its own ,I stumbled when reading it in the flow of the verse. It did make me chuckle though...thanks
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Liz

Sorry to be late in answering you guys , was a little under the weather today lol ...that second verse has a little need for some more punctuation to give it more flow I know what it needs when I feel a little better will fix it up ... thanks for your comment hun I am always so happy when you like mine ... and you have been writing beautifully lately , will be round later to read what everyones been up to ..tale care love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Stumbling is...

what made ass and ground join. LOL. I can't think of a better way to put it, and it's not that bad. Kinda like catching your toe, but recovering so quick that it was almost like it didn't happen. I loved the twist at the end. I know that many ppl have had that same experience, but when you did it,[ twisted ] it was so neat and quick! Great work, hun. ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Gee

You got it lol I have been working on more shock endings and making them different trying out new things all the time now new flavour if you will lol thanks for your comment sorry to be late in answering was down for the count today ... take care will catch you later and see what you have been cooking up ... love and higgest bugs Jayne
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Liz And Gee

Thanks for the comments guys am not feeling real well today will answer when I am up to it ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
L

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Seren

Deep and heartfelt are these words. You have written with a passion and it worked. Hope u are feeling better soon. Love to all, Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Lyz

Heya huni was good to hear from you I am still down in newy lol been in bed all day sick as ... I will live feeling a little better tonight so hopefully on the mend ... will be going home sometime tomorrow not sure when lol gotta go into the city and see another quack lol yikes lol ... thanks for your beautiful compliment hun (huggles) will be round soon seeing what everyone has been up to love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Seren:

I know this beautiful work of yours stands for something greater than tripping to the floor. Most of your poems have a meaningful twist, and this time you placed it in the title. We all must learn to walk humbly --and carefully-- on the earth, that we may have time enough to know the beauty and the glory of all things. Great poem, and as always, you are a master of the English language! Lv&Hgs, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Hugo ..

LOL I am going to have to watch you ... you read between my lines way too well lol and you got it in one thats the meaning of this poem ... wake up before its too late ;) your a clever man I am smiling like a cat here lol hugs Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Hope you are back...

To feeling better. I look forward to seeing what new surprises you have in store. Get better soon, ~ Gee.
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Gee

ME too !! just spent a couple of days down here with the boys and I have been sick the whole time lol yay me lol nah hopefully it will settle in a couple of days just at the moment? I feel rotten ... thanks for thinking of me hun (hugz) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x