Other World

I opened my eyes
to the next world,
finding it foreign
A twist to the curl

The sky was pink
as I had dreamed,
but everything wasn't
as it might seem

The grass was white
and waving fast,
trees were orange
and trunks are vast

The sun was purple
and flames flew off,
I could see them clearly
but some may scoff

A group of people
all colored the same,
rainbows of skin
with nothing to shame

Singing with voices
the angels adore,
as they hang over clouds
in their need to hear more

And off to the right
I see the moons,
forty of them
eclipsed to zoom

I close my eyes
overwhelmed indeed,
waiting for angels
to sing the next lead

— Seren, Sep 27, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Hello, Hello, Hello

A tender poem full of color, and tranquility. The rainbow choir sounds to be a happy lot, and this write is overwhelming in itself ,the title is just right. Quite enjoyable to read girl. Well done. Now, I will have what you are having as I never got this great effect with my alcohol induced state this weekend. Lol. No ill effects but also no new worlds. Lol. Loved it. Love Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Lyz

You must have commented on this not long after I posted it LOL ... I am sooo tired i feel like I am nearly going to sleep sitting here in the boys loungeroom lol... and they just started drinking ... I think I might hate them a little pmsl !!! might have one bourbon before bed one wont kill me but it will knock me out!!!! lol will take photos and post them to jade in the morning they gonna be all mucked up tonight they got two bottles of bourbon and one bottle of scotch lol think I told you that already huh ? lol maybe a little OVER tired been a long day getting ready to come down here getting the kids sorted and getting down here and then having to go shopping, god woman I need energiser batteries mine have run out lmao love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x

Orphani

16 years 8 months ago

Somehow I cant imagine Lyz

Somehow I cant imagine Lyz not seeing pink on a drunken sheleck. Thanks for taking the flambangelded lot along. 40 moons makes me feel right at home.Now all i need is forty girls and a few viagra.(yeah right)! Very imaginative and creative. Skillfully executed in your delicate style. ...........................o

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Barry

lol one day I expect to see lyz on a drunken binge I am sure i will be as bad as her probably worse her daughter comes to my house shes seeing my nephew lol soooo the world and others get smaller and smaller thanks for enjoying this one its one of my favourites I have to say when i wrote this one I felt an amazing sense of calm but then I was listening to some amazing voilins battling at the time of writing soooo that explains the other world lol I think ... hugs Love and huggest bugs Jayne x x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Seren:

I don't know if this was indeed a dream, or you've been raptured into a most amazing, fantastic fairyland. The thing is that I wonder how is it you found it to be a twist to the curl? But I'm glad the the sunny flames flew off. The purple color is said to have that effect. Excellent! A great poem, a close encounter of the first kind! Sincerely, Hugo

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Hugo

Bit of both to be honest bit of a dream and then I mixed my imagination in with it ... wont say which are which LOL I shall leave you all to decide (hugs) thanks as always for your beautiful compliments its always nice to know people enjoy my scribbles you take care love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x

greeneyes

16 years 8 months ago

beautiful

This was once again, a masterpiece.You take my breath away with your words. you make it look so easy. Love, Greeneyes

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Elizabeth , I wish it

Dear Elizabeth , I wish it was easy lol but its not, and I know you know that ... thanks for your beautiful compliment as always a pleasure to see you on my page will be round reading later to see what you all have been up to ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x