hardcorechick28

Sep 27, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

DeMona's Revenge: Some Violent Content/Explicit Language

Through the darkened forest
Admist the quiet branches
She stalks back to their lair
A strange woman's smell
Polluting the air

The closer she comes
The faster she runs
Halting behind a tree
All her senses heightened
As she glances around
Eyes flaming red
With hell's deepest rage
As she tracks the bitch down

Stepping into the clearing
She hisses wildly
Sweat pouring from her brow
Trickling down her lace bodice
Between milk white breasts

The odor is stronger
Almost suffocating
It smells like whore
Tryin to get with her man

Into the lair she races
Pulling the bitch off his chest
Claws raking down her cheating back
As she flicks the flesh from their tips
She throws her to the ground

Lifting her back up
Dragging by snarly, brown roots
Into forest's eternal darkness
Smashing her picture perfect face
Against the first tree trunk in sight

Jaw bones cracking
Nose bent to one side
Where oh where can this
precious little Beauty Queen hide

Blood trickling down her face
Teeth splintered against the wood
Laying her naked body down
To finish the job

Crushing down
On her delicate chest
Deflating her a size
Sharp heels
Cracking Ribs
How long does it take
To make this bitch dead?

Sinking to her level
Face to face
Taking her head in hand
And as her neck snaps in two
Hanging from a thread
DeMona can be heard laughing
Smiling a bloody grin
This is a warning to all
Think before fucking with me again

— hardcorechick28, Sep 27, 2009

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raskin

16 years 8 months ago

my goodness

What a tough little tart you created. Visual and violent but why would a tough independent she wolf want to stay with an abusive male? I'm curious? It just doesn't make sense to me, I suppose it is a view of love as possesion. I am just musing now, sorry. Raskin

hardcorechick28

16 years 8 months ago

this is

His first offense...believe me, she is not done with him. Took care of the girl first and is on her way back to take care of her male counterpart...unfortunately can only post one per day...the sequel to this will follow.....If you have read any of my others, you will see that DeMona and Deacon is an ongoing saga...the ups and downs of Vampire Love.

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

DeMona...

Getting better all the time. Once you get the graphic part down, you will have to work at making it poetry, like I did. It is a progression that you have to work at. But it is well worth it in the end. I like how she is coming along. Killer is watching too! I understand her association with Deacon, and feel that they will have many ups and downs. It's the nature of the beast! Nice work, ~ Gee

hardcorechick28

16 years 8 months ago

im trying.....

but not very good at it. DeMona has alot of mixed emotions and is having trouble placing them, much like her creator. Glad you enjoyed it...she still has to pay Deacon back for his indiscretion. More to come.....

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

You are doing well...

Just keep working at it, you are following a natural progression, The same one I went through. I am still learning something about how to present him everytime I turn him loose! Ooooohhh, Deacon, You're in deep doo-doo... Tip... Watch as many slasher movies as you can. Even bad ones can give you ideas. You may look at the way that something that is done, and say, " I would have used this, instead, or I would have done that! You think that hurt? Then write it! ~ Gee

hardcorechick28

16 years 8 months ago

thank u

for the words of encouragement....i am trying to come up with the sequel to the last one since I am off today. I think of new things every day of how to improve her. Usually I am at work and scrap paper isnt always handy so I have to try and remember them when I come home. Then sometimes I dont get on here cuz my son wont go to bed, or like now, I have that god awful cold everyone else has had. Am going to start copying my poems from here and pasting them to a word document so i can edit, add and revise. Having shown the DeMona poems and other stuff to people outside the site, they all think it would be a worthwhile effort to put it in book form and turn my dark poetry into something. Im thinking of titling my book, the Mosoleum (spelling is probably wrong) Chronicles,(subtitle underneath, havent thought of that yet). Want to include pictures from my cemetery findings. Any help you can contribute would be much appreciated as you are one of my best friends and resources.

KINGZOMBIE

16 years 8 months ago

I love it

Didnt know we could be that graphic on here. I look forward to the next one.I'm not even try to imagine where this is going:-)

hardcorechick28

16 years 8 months ago

thank you....

Glad you are looking forward to reading more...Yes you can be graphic on here as long as you put a little warning next to the title so that people know before they begin to read. You can be as graphic as you want. How are your poems coming??? Like I said, she isnt done. Has to get a hold of her male counterpart next...LOL. will try to post that sometime this week. back to work so i wont have as much time to dedicate. talk soon....

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

=0

Deacon is in it up to his neck, lol. Can't wait to read the next installment. suggestion: take a small notebook, purse or pocket size, and a pen with you at all times. That is what I do, and it might work for you, too. Always, Cat

hardcorechick28

16 years 8 months ago

great suggestion

Never seems to be enough scrap paper around when I need it..have the perfect little notebook for such an occassion. Thank you!!!