Seren

Sep 26, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

From Ash to a Phoenix

Rising from the ashes
    a daughter of Phoenix
     flails through membranes
       as new blood flows,
        she rides the heady feel
      gliding the becoming
       and soaring to life
     and in finding wings,
      reforming and setting free
      of restraint,
       a voice unleashes,
        calling to the four winds
          kindling the fire of inspiration,
         lightning strokes tips to
       a darkened reflection,
      bringing to it
     a finger of hope,
     a lone spark of energy
    life ebbs and flows
   and in the pain of the sword
rebirths

As the Phoenix
stepping out of reflections
in shadows,
casting aside doubt,
and finding,
peace
while I burn

— Seren, Sep 26, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 8 months ago

Cool write miss Jayne

you are truly a Master(mistress). I don't think I have ever seen any of your work in the lonely list. And I hope I never will. Love you to bits forever and ever. XX:)fleur

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Love you to bits forever and

Love you to bits forever and ever and ever :P ((huggles))

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 8 months ago

title suggestion

The Ashes of the Phoenix

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Fleur

Ello stranger its good to see you (hugs) ... thanks for the read lol hey one or two might float to the lonely poetry not everyones going to get this one ... and I wasnt surprised noone had commented yet ... this ones not just a poem and holds a deeper meaning for me , you maybe one of the few that would actually work it out ... and I love your suggestion for the title might make that from ashes of the phoenix ...from ashes to a phoenix ... Hmmmm I like that one lol .... Thanks for the support I am always happy when I get to see you LOL just woke up had a big ass sleep today gonna be a long night Love you forever huni Jayne x x x

Liamb

16 years 8 months ago

I liked

the visual of this poem, almost like flames, and the thought within the words. An enjoyable read, thanks for sharing. Liam

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Liam

Thanks so much for your comment on my scribble ... wasnt sure if anyone would get this one but I am glad you liked it :) (hugs) thanks lol didnt expect many comments on this one ;) but you got it right flames and phoenix standing firm in the middle kind regards Jayne x x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Jayne:

The burnings of eloquence are set afire within every single word of this delightful poem. The pace and the images are exquisite and tasteful. I love this poem. Thank you, Sincerely, Hugo

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Hugo

thanks for your beautiful comment you are always so giving and kind ... and I always smile when I read your comments ... glad you liked this one ... its a very write that was dusted off rewriten and this is the end result ... you take care love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Hey dear girl

Thinking too much again I see. You have a great flaming write here. You are the Phoenix and u will rise with pride, And your flame ignited will blow those ashes aside, Spreading your wings on life you will glide, No more the pain of rebirth shall u hide. Lots of love to u and urs dear girl. Lyz, XX.

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Lyz

this is an old write that I dug out of the cellar so to speak and totally rewrote it for a more positive ending lol it didnt have a very good ending ... I know sometimes a sad ending is a good change and a good twist, at the moment though I am trying to me more positive in my writing , makes for a happier mind lol (hugs) So glad you liked this one I was actually surprised to get four comments on this one I didnt expect to get any LOL love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

greeneyes

16 years 8 months ago

what can i say

You know I am a fan. Everything you write is magic. Love, Greeneyes

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

Thanks so much for your message and I am so happy when you guys like these ones wouldnt be the same without you kind people ... I loved your latest and it was wonderful ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 8 months ago

There is a lifting feeling

There is a lifting feeling while reading due to your formatting. I found that interesting and fresh. I wonder if "lightning stroke tips" may have worked better - leave stroke singular rather then plural. I have always loved writings about The Phoenix. Very good.

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Wisteria

This ones just another one thats not edited I know it needs more work ... but at the moment I don't have the time and will get to it when I am up to it :) Kind regards Jayne x x