Winter ribbon

you live in the milky way indeed. This is such a dreamy poem, like a dark winter's night. Winter ribbon may not be a word, but it is a beautiful and imaginative idea. Yours, ~Nina P.S. something spins ?

Molly, I adored this one. Line six I think spun instead of spin would work better? Also I think stanza five would be better left out, Just my personal opinion. Once again, very enjoyable! __________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

You are the master of the haunting image: cab ride, winter landscape, lonely and surreal, with the cosmic overtones of disconnect. 2 points: 1)......."and somthing spin in the next galaxy" not pluralising "spin" to spins becomes an asking of somthing to spin. Pluralising "spin" to spins explaines that somthing is spinning. wanted to clarify intent. "2)....."winter ribbon as a second address is surely not a word? I reply" A question to the reader or self? winter ribbon is then percieved as one word I reply should be I ask unless the intent is to submerge the reader in to deeper layers and then it turns freudian. Odd Molly - with a tweek of maddness.Exellent Oh yes your picture is more approachable without the im kicking your ass out look

Molly! Now I can find you in the sky, I just have to look up and see you there in the heavens, glittering the night sky as a star! Yes a star is what you are! I have read the comments about spins and spun Molly and this is my advice... I think spins is actually the correct word, however I think what Janice & Nina are refering to is the word prior to this "something" as this word denotes the tense as past so it would be spun. But I think you are talking about the celestrial bodies that make up a galaxy and they all spin, round and round they go... in fact the entire galaxy spins! And there you have it ... it spins not spun. Maybe your home is in the heavens Molly, and the winter ribbon is like the ice and debris that floats arounds stars and planets in rings (like saturn etc..) but I think that winter ribbon is the cold you are hiding from indoors and the heating fuel bill keeps rising! Walking down that streetlamp lit walkway would give a chill too... or are you going to phone home like ET and be taken back to the stars where you belong in a bright illuminated spaceship... to travel the sea of stars. Love the ending to be carried away light by light... in to the distance and dream. Just utter brilliance there! Mother Earth we seek! Great wording and ever playful in the way you write Molly, i am just loving every moment I am spending reading you! Fabulous stuff! Dale :)

As we lay back, let your words waft us to a place of comparable myth & wonder, lamp light, starlight, you always shimmer so beautifully in your lovely flow of words... I love this so much. Cheers Anni~ "The personal life deeply lived always expands into truths beyond itself". Anais Nin: