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jetz
jetz
Sep 26, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Eternity

  Eternity

      
       Eternity.  I know the word
       I have used it a time or two
       But never did it have meaning
       Never, before you
      
       The tall dark stranger
       The one that oozed passion and lust
       The one that brought me to my knees
       When I swore.. never again

       The one that gave me life
       When death was what I wanted
       The one others think as evil
       Never has anything been farther from the truth

       You.. my teacher.. heart of my heart
       Soul of my soul
       Because of you.. I know Eternity
       Because of you.. I want Eternity

       Because of you.



Sue

— jetz, Sep 26, 2009

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Region, Country: South eastern Connecticut, USA

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jetz

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Patrick, (V,) I love

Patrick, (V,) I love your reply, but please tell me V isn't going minimalistic. I drink in each and every one of his words. I hate the idea of dying of thirst....Sounds like a horrible way to go! love, me
L

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Jetz

This is lovely, love every stanza so what can I say, well done girl. Love it. Love Lyz. XX
jetz

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Thank you for such a nice

Thank you for such a nice comment Lyz. You always have such nice things to say, and please know, I appreciate each word. Thanks again, Sue
jetz

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Hugo, Thanks for

Hi Hugo, Thanks for taking the time to read and respond. So many of my poems are in rhyme that I often wonder how free verse comes across to others. Your response gives me a clue. Once again, thank you. Sue
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 8 months ago

I missed this one!

Jetz, I am sorry for missing this exquisite posting. I know who you wrote this for and he must be most proud...it has to be one of your best ever. Perfection! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
jetz

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Dan, Forgive me for

Hi Dan, Forgive me for taking so long to reply. You know how bad I am once I get behind in my reading. Thanks for your kind words. I value your comments and opinions. as always, Sue