KINGZOMBIE

Sep 24, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

"NOT SPEAK "

Silent and weak I sit down not speak. My mother is sadness, my father deceit. They dont notice when I won't speak. I sit silent in my thought's, very discreet. Her scent on his clothes my mother ignored. My father the "man" he run's with a whore. My mother can tell cause he's drunk on the floor,they yell and they scream slamming the door, he's mean and he's nasty hitting my mother.I pray for my family and I pray not to suffer, still I just sit, I sit down and dont speak. I just sit but I notice, never saying a word.To busy for me, so I trust in the lord.

— KINGZOMBIE, Sep 24, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

Favorite Poets: I have many favorite poets but I like Poe the most.I would also feel wrong if I didn't include music to this also, for I find it to be of great inspiration.These are lyrics to a song by Monster Magnet called Ozium, it never fails to put me in the writing mood and thought I would share it, lol., " I'm up to my brain in the mire of an ancient swamp, Pteranadon smiles at me and flies up to god, Baby let me drink deep from your globes of reality, Writhe your naked ass to the mindless groove, baby give your tongue a taste and follow me up to my room, the bullgod has your head, and baby thats just fine, now it is time, we became the mighty cell, wrap those hungry jacks? to the mindless groove, they say we've got a lifetime, but we know that ain't true, I will not be denied, I will not be denied, baby, the faster you gyrate the faster we'll be there, arms up overhead, a goddess in the ancient song, work that mighty world to the mindless groove, they say weve got a life time but we know that ain't true, I will not be denied, I will not be denied, they say weve got a lifetime, but we know that ain't true, I will not be denied I will not be denied"

Critiques

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

Welcome

Welcome to neopoet! I loved third poem, very powerful. Your other stuff is abosolutly amazing, I look foward to reading you often. love, Greeneyes

KINGZOMBIE

16 years 10 months ago

Thank you

Most people on here dont like my stuff.I think because the dark nature of it all,and I'm very uneducated I think it show's.

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Kingzombie...

While I like the content of this poem, I felt it wasn't delivered to the reader with the clarity intended... as a child we often can see things our parents have missed, or refuse to see, great theme... I think the first line is unneeded, but that is my opinion. I just sit down and won't speak... felt it should be a bit longer for the cadence of your write, the rhythm... I just sit down and refuse to speak(only a suggestion) welcome to the site... please do make comments on the other poets works here and let them know you are here, offer your own insights... interact... Richard

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

hello

I must echo Richards comments, as I agree with him. I wish the poem were longer. I happen to love dark poetry, so I look forward to reading more. Welcome to Neopoet. Always, Cat

KINGZOMBIE

16 years 10 months ago

THANK YOU BOTH

With the suggestions that you and Richard both made.I will work to remedy in the future.Ive already been working on my comma problem. THANKS AGAIN

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

Just a thought:Silent and

Just a thought: Silent and weak I sit down, I do not speak. My mother is sadness. My father is indiscreet. I just sit down and I won’t speak. The scent on his clothes my mother ignored. My father the “man” runs off with a whore. My mother can tell when he’s drunk on the floor, still I just sit down, it's damned hard to be a witness, I sit down. I do not speak. ~Anna

Orphani

16 years 10 months ago

Always remember King, the

Always remember King, the content of the poem is nine tenths of the equation. structure is just window dressing - though important. I would rather see dirty clothes on a king than a crown on a pig. Your courage and truth speak loudly to me. you write with heart and soul ..................................o

KINGZOMBIE

16 years 10 months ago

THANK YOU

I'm glad that you all can see through my poor writing skills into the meat of my topic.

KINGZOMBIE

16 years 10 months ago

thank you

I'm sorry that it remind's you of your parent's .I just try to be honest. It's sad when they dont notice that their children notice. That's what make's us human I suppose?

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

I too see past the meat …

I too see past the meat ... solid write King I enjoyed the dark read ... kind regards Jayne

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