ziggy

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Broken friendship

       Show me something real
   something i can touch and feel
       Begone with this pretense
   where i dwell is present tense.

       I now treat you with disdain
       your words in me find pain
       You say " time is a healer it
        soaks up the pain hangs
        over my head like a cloud
          in the rain "

      The fire in me burns strong
         now of with you begone
     for your friendship i no longer
     seek , when you were mild i
    was meek with kids gloves i
     treated you like a child my trust
       in you we can not find .

     Thinking back i must off been
      blind i have left you far behind .

— ziggy, Sep 23, 2009

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ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

broken friendship

enda, patrick collins. hi i made that correction it was just posted in a rush thanks for reading and you said you want to see more i have 30 more posted here for if you have the time , lol ziggyyyyyyyy

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

something is gnawing at me...

"I think too, we all relate to people in our lives and then we all find out, we are not alone, so this wass great, you got it out, now more writes I would love to see!! lyn~: if this is so great, why did you only give it two stars? and BTW, there is only one "s" in was. 1 star = poor 2 stars = okay 3 stars = good 4 stars = great 5 stars = awesome I am curious, Cat

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

you read my mind cat

enda, patrick collins. i agree cat , personally i am delighted with this write but folk are folk its no big deal i still got a real kick out of writing it and reading it back many thanks cat you really read my mind spooky or wat ,,,,,,,zigggggggggy and it is any thing but short for me ,,,,,

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

I would edit if I could

but I can't seem to use that function. I would edit out the remark about spelling the word "was" as that was uncalled for. The rest of the comment stands, as we do have a star system no matter anyone's feelings about it. And as long as we do have one, anyone using it should take the time to learn how to use it properly, or not use it at all. It is one of my jobs as an Advocate to inform and educate. I do apologize about the spelling remark. Always, Cat

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Edd

I really liked this. It reminds me of a false friend I once had. She was all take and no give. GREAT poem. in these lines: soaks up the pain hangs hangs over my head like a take out one of the "hangs" and then it will be awesome. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

opps again

enda, patrick collins. o cat that was a really poor mistake by me thats wat i get for eating dinner and posting a poem all at the same time lol , o well i am but human many thanks thanks for pointing that out .

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

LOL

I am paying attention, here are the five stars you deserve. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

broken friendship

enda, patrick collins. ah cat your one in a million irish eyes are smiling on you xx

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Edd

I feel I must apologize to you for starting a ruckus on your page. I was trying to educate someone on the star system and its usage, and I'm sure I could have said it better, as is my job as an Advocate. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

cat

enda, patrick collins. not at all cat i also got the wrong end of the stick your an advocate, i did vote for you i hold you in high esteem cat your an awesome poet and a fine person as i know you i guess we are all here for the same reason and people spark of each other here just as they do in any walk of life , part of me thinks this star thing is not a totally good idea , its strange to think ruckus could be started through a poem called broken friendship , lol chat soon xx

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Edd

LOL, it does seem odd, as you say, to have a ruckus on a poem called Broken Friendship. Thank you for being such a great friend. Always, Cat

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I loved this it is an emotional write and to comment I had to go way down.I see no corrections or any thing. I see another hornets nest. Told you you always hit the spot for the matter of fact.I enjoyed this and u deserve the praise. So I dont bend ur ear, I will send u a message. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

broken friendship

enda, patrick collins. hi lyz , many thanks i like this my self it really hits the spot for me too. lol i know a couple of lads i would like to send it to but i am not like that and they to dumb to get my meaning that may sound harsh but ya need to know them i rarely like a poem of my own as much as this one i guess its the theme and what it means and if any one can connect with it then it must be wort while i got my ticket for the poetry work shop i cant wait for it i hope they not all snooty ya know stuck up if so i wont be long bringing them back to earth lol chat soon my friend i had modem trouble all day that drives me nuts ,,,,,,,,,,