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Big Account... Warning! Graphic Violence!

Killer steps up to the window

He's waited long enough

The doors have all been locked

And now he can get tough
 

He waited while the girls

All talked about boy-friends

And now his patience has

Come right to the end
 

The other's wouldn't help

The girl on drive-up duty

The manager was kissing ass

Trying to get some booty
 

Killer's seen enough

Now he's really pissed

He bends Mike into a pretzel

Now his own ass he can kiss
 

The girls are all screaming now

'Cept that hard-core chick

He staples blondie's lips to nose

And gives her chin a lick
 

The vault is standing open

He herds them all inside

Hard-core chick he leaves out

The rest are going to ride
 

The ones that have open mouths

He stuffs 'em full of bills

Mike, he whimpers on a bed of loot

Cash won't cure HIS ills
 

The blood is running all on the floor

As 'hard-core chick' yells give 'em more

A pretty hand with pink, pink nails

Slammed in a drawer, amid the wails
 

Now it's time to count the fingers

Put them in the counting machine

Blood squirts out of the wringers

Ohhh...listen to her scream
 

There's a client, one who wouldn't go

Hiding behind the ornate vase

Killer spots him, don't you know

Used a paper-weight to smash his face
 

The last one is just scared right to death

She can't even scream no more

Breaks the bones in that lovely breast

As he slams the big vault door
 

He motions now to Hard-core

Come and let me out

She does so quite reluctantly

He kisses off her pout
 

As he walks away

She hears him mutter low

"Thanks for the excersise" my dear

But now, I really have to go

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

— Geezer, Sep 22, 2009

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Bloody hell, u go Killer

Marvelous, still room for more, do NOT leave it hanging like that, ENCORE, I loved it and this sequel has a guest I see, aww, Killer getting soft, Bloody beauty mate. These could be little gold writes for u, And may take u straight to the bank for real. Think about it.Even a comic book series, like Judge Dredd or someone. i could rave 4 eva, Its Good. There, I commented. Lol. love lyz XX
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

The guest...

Is Hard-corechick, who asked for Killer to come visit her bank. She needed him to shake things up. He is not getting soft, he wants to meet DeMona, and he can't very well kill off her creator. There are a lot more Killer series in the future. I am thinking of hiring him out to other people who would like to have their job visited. ~ Gee
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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Hey

I knew who your guest was and I still reckon These Killer series would make good reading material on a regular basis.In all honesty, I know what these Aussie kids like to read, some of the books and comics I still have here from my two acn shock, yet they grew decent. You have excelled yourself in this because I feel when you get them coming back for more you are onto a winner. I am not of expert opinion but I know what I like, and my hubby is a tough cookie and he read the 2 killers and he is not interested in much written but he loved what you had done. Just my opinion. Hey, u could get to visit Disney and Australia. Tada, could be just the wind fall u and your lovely need. U should be proud of this. Love from the rave on avon lady, Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Gee

LMAO can I open my eyes again now ? lol just joking ... I think your killer maybe developing some finesse and I like, would be nice for him to evolve with your poetry ;) wonderful write as per the norm :P love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
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hardcorechick28

16 years 8 months ago

I....

LOVE IT!!!! Thank you so much for bringing Killer into the bank. He expresses many of my emotions at the end of a long day and thank you for including me in your poem, that was totally AWESOME!!! I think I might have to work you into one of my DeMona and Deacon works, as well as find a way to incorporate Killer and DeMona's partnership. Serial Killer meets Vampire Tramp!!! Should be kick ass...talk to ya soon....
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Our Pleasure...

Bringing Killer to the bank was a pleasure. They have such nice people and things to play with. I might have to buy Killer one of those counting machines to play with. He seems rather taken with it. LOL [I'm buying him a nail gun for Christmas] Shhhhhhh... Looking forward to meeting DeMona and Deacon, and would love to try working with them. ~ Gee
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hardcorechick28

16 years 8 months ago

I am....

posting a new one in a few minutes....brings DeMona a little closer to you...so you can get a better idea of what she is made of. I think her "killer" instincts would suit your Killer and she would make a worthy lure/partner. Let me know what you think...... PS...counting machines are fun...takes off fingers real easy....