LEAD HEAD

Bullet in the brain
another been slain
a war of words ripped
asunder the price they
pay is six feet under.

judge and jury in the
chamber of a gun is
how i heard it sung .

— ziggy, Sep 22, 2009

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Seren

16 years 10 months ago

This criptic poem has hidden

This criptic poem has hidden meanings I think ... more than whats on the surface Patrick ... great write ... Bul[l]et in the first line but other than that a solid write ... Kind regards Jayne :)

ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

enda, patrick collins. hi you are so right , if you change the word they to she it becomes personal a long story that i am not about to talk about but not on line anyway thanks for reading between the lines ,,,,,,,,, ziggy

lyz

16 years 10 months ago

Hi

I thought there was something behind this one, but you have always been a matter of fact, I like it, worded great and read aloud, it is a matter of fact. Well done. Lyz XX

ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

lead head

enda, patrick collins. hi , cheers lyz i reckon i am a matter of fact i have others that are not but not sure if they ready for posting , but there is a poetry workshop in my local town on oct 1st thinking of going because its been ran by a well known playwrite/poet it should be interesting i am a little bored with matter of fact poetry my own i mean if i don`t change soon i will stop altogether i think its getting me no where , many thanks lyz ,,,,,,,,,,,,,

lyz

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I know what u mean, but u should try every avenue, me, just a hobby, yet I may finish my book. Never know.You do have a talent as many do on this site, I think maybe it is a stepping stone. I suppose you could do both? I would hate to see you go.I know poetry means more to others than some, I might dabble but I like to be able to enjoy reading a poem and if the poet can give the reader what they like, well that is what I call a true poet.If u go to the workshop let me know how u like it.I hope to see and read more of u next week, I am flat chat until sunday now, wedding etc, but i will chat again then. Night Irish Eyes love Lyz. XX

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

hello

This poem has meaning for me, but it is probably not the meaning you intended. I see tow people ragging away at each other, with neither one listening. Therefore no compromise can be made. I'd love to know the real meaning. p.s. What happened to your other poem? I went to read it again and couldn't find it. Always, Cat

hugo la rosa

16 years 10 months ago

Ziggy:

Very dramatic, very drastic, but very true, for that's what anger amounts to. The consequences of it all, none of the involved therewith can fathom, for those are the uses of war and hate. Well done, my dear friend, a great poem! Sincerely, Hugo

Hooded Stranger

16 years 10 months ago

Ziggy

ok my friend, I now know where you're coming from. I'll say no more here. Very very well constructed. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

lead head

enda, patrick collins. since you know wher i am coming from many thanks cheers ,,,,,,ziggy

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