Seren

Sep 21, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Looks Like Rain

Black are the clouds
that sweep from the sea,
crashing through trees
to thrash toward me

Objects are flying
the air is alive,
a storm that rumbles
in sheets it arrives

A roof is walking
without any soles,
and the pants of priests
hang off light poles

A street sign flys past
at the speed of light,
a police car follows
its headlights shine bright

Deep in the cellar
we shiver and shake,
as the world around
turns into a lake

And all this goes on
inside my head,
cause outside my window
the silence is dead

— Seren, Sep 21, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

autumnphoenix

16 years 10 months ago

Very vivid

Hello, I enjoyed the read.The storm took mealong onthe ride. Good stuff. Dana

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Dana, btw thats a beautiful name I have always loved it .. thanks for the read and the comment this one was just a bit of fun and I haven't finished editing etc ... thanks soo much I am always so pleased when people like these fun ones :D Love Higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Lyn

there is nothing wrong with a laugh and this one was a mad write lol ... will message you back tonight am feeling a lot better this afternoon :) take care of you and yours my friend ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Jayne...

I am glad it was all in your head, whew... I was going to say you better head for the attic... the cellar will be taking on water real fast... lol priest pants on poles... quite stimulating imagery used here. while reading this it reminded me of when I was young, I stayed with my grandparents a lot of my childhood, and my grandmother was old school, during a lightning storm she would have us all gather in the front room and hold hands... she was very afraid of a storm... as kids, we used to laugh about it, but looking back it was a family event that I actually looked forward to... no lights on, and just us to hold onto... the things remembered... thanks for taking me back there... Richard

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Richard ...

LOL I am glad it was all in my head but I am beginning to think I shouldn't write weather ones ... woke up this morning and it was pouring rain and its going to storm on and off all day the weather is really bad here lol heat and humidity making for lots of spring storms ... When I was young I was the one they were always dragging inside cause I was, and still am awed by storms and the force of them ... nature at her worst can be spectacularly beautiful ... outside right now the clouds are gathering again black as pitch, and I think we maybe going to get a massive storm tonight usually get them in the afternoons here ... take care of you and your lovely write thanks so much for the comment and the read much appreciated :) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

seabhac

16 years 10 months ago

Wow some Spring you are

Wow some Spring you are having... Liked this Jayne but the lines storming it rumbles to go into overdrive to go into seems long winded and awkard some how here ....suggestion might be "going into overdrive" Got a lovely laugh at the lines and the pants of priests hang off light poles You are certainly flowing at the moment...apologies for freaking you earlier time means nothing to poetry but timing is everything Hugs

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Liz

Was quite alright, I dont mind the odd startle lol was funny though I thought wtf where is my message I thought Neopoet was having a fit and this ones not edited either so will have another look tonight at that stanza LOL your good hun cause you always go to the stanza I was having trouble with you take care love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Jayne

I'm so glad it is all in your head, as I can remember a few storms that felt and sounded like they were about to take the roof off of the place! This is a fanciful and fun read. I loved the imagery as only you can dish it up. Thanks for the read. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Cat,

Its not in my head today I just finished telling Richard i might not write anymore weather ones cause its storming bad here today lol ... I am glad you got the fun side of it I was a bit worried about the pants of priests line cause I didn't want to offend anyone ... but I was just trying to show that mother nature doesn't discriminate against anyone we are all at her mercy .. thanks as always for the read and the comment hun ... hope your feeling better huni and that your comfortable ... take care love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x

Hooded Stranger

16 years 10 months ago

What, with you and...

Moonman, writing about storms and rain, I am missing it all over here in cold, but dry England. I liked your storm being inside your head...excellent slant. Priests Pants!...LOL!...very apt as I am just watching 'Angels & Demons' Great write...you do it so simply. kindest regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

HS

LOL right now I am jealous as hell of you I couldn't go to the pictures to see Angels and Demons(chemo no immune system) and have been hanging to watch it ... If I cry hard and loud enough ya reckon someone will care ?? pmsl not likely glad you liked this one it was just a bit of fun and like i said above its not edited yet so will tweak and there was another stanza I might put in if I can get it right ... take care my friend pmsl I am still jealous :| hahaha love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x

Hooded Stranger

16 years 10 months ago

Seren

I saw it at the cinema and now I have it on DVD. I preferred the Da Vinci Code, but A&D is still a great film. Have you read the book? I also bought Dan Brown's new book, but I haven't got around to reading it yet. I like poems un-edited, normally because it is the raw emotions and feelings and after editing, some, can lose their direction and become a little too perfect for their own good. I don't think you are crying nearly hard and loud enough yet. I would lend it to you, but I think we may be a few thousands miles apart and probably a different DVD region too. I'll tell you what happens...Mr Plum did it in the kitchen with the spanner. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear HS

LOL @ Mr Plum ... I have read all Dan Brown's books and I am a huge fan ... havent read the new one was waiting till I got to hospital next monday LOL wont take me more than 3 hours so its a good way to pass the time ... and your just a bloody stirrer I cannot wait to see the movie and see if it lives up to the book , feels like i read that book a forever ago lol finally the movie comes out .... will wait for the DVD anything good is worth waiting for I say lol ...as we are definately thousands of miles away and different DVD regions ... dammit take care kind regards Jayne :)

Hooded Stranger

16 years 10 months ago

Bloody Stirrer

Well, with all that has been said to me today, that sounds like a complement or is it a compliment? Don't bother with the new Dan Brown book, that was Mr Green in the Dining Room with a chainsaw, two virgins and a Catholic Priest, who was looking for his underpants. LOL! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear HS

you got it right the first time compliment ... bloody stirrers are thick on the ground in my house :p pmsl mr Green ... take care *big smile* Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Orphani

16 years 10 months ago

you have my curiosity

you have my curiosity tweaked have you ever experienced what you discribe, you must be aware of the deep underlying psychology to pants of priest on light poles my dear. A crypticly revealing work.A poking bit of fun that hides what? last 2 lines i think.

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Barry,

In Australia we have some of the worst storms in the world sometimes ...the heat and humidity make for excellent storm weather ... and yes I have lived and road out a cyclone when I lived up north ... it was shocking and devastated everything ... and this is an awful thing to say but I am never frightened of storms doesn't matter how bad they get ... I am always the one with the mouth hanging open awed in mother at her best of her worst and the priest pants on the light pole was just showing as I said above that mother nature doesn]t discriminate lol my dad is an elder in the church and read it this morning and has plans to show our reverend lol thinks he will get a giggle out of it lol there is a little deeper meaning , will tell you next time we are talking lmao ;) long story Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 10 months ago

Hey girl

Don't send the bludger this way, I got a wedding to prepare for this week and a B.B.Q. and visitors and pick ups and mowing and washing, oh hang on, it is in your head. Phew, You just sent me a little crazy. Cool wet write, Now SMILE missy moo, this comments just for you, hold your nose and blow real hard, and send that storm into the yard. Love ya. Lyz XX

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

PMSL

Lyz have you really got a wedding this weekend cause I feel bad its storming its ass off here hope its not down there ?:O ... I gotta stop writing about bad weather every time I post one we get whatever I post .. lmfao !!! I might not have enough blow to get rid of this one its been building up since lunchtime and its going to be a beauty LOL love you and take care higgest bugs Jayne x x

weirdelf-test

16 years 10 months ago

I feel like I wrote this!

my head is still a very noisy place despite meditation, yoga and Tai Chi. Thank you for this generous share kind regards, Jean, meow, yip, purr, yowl and perfect body language of approval, contempt or demand

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Jean

My head is always noisy hun,it goes with having four kids and four cats and four dogs lol and a pet diamond python snake lol I have a menagerie... so glad you liked this one just a bit of fun to lighten up sometimes I need a giggle so I wriet myself one lol (hug) Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x P.S say ello to our mutual friend for me I am missing his ass

weirdelf-test

16 years 10 months ago

just between you and me

and everyone who reads this, he has a cute one. kind regards, Jean, meow, yip, purr, yowl and perfect body language of approval, contempt or demand

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

LOL I will have to trust you

LOL I will have to trust you on that one I haven't had the pleasure of meeting him in person yet buts hes a lovely bloke and a good mate ... and I already have plans when I get down there to catch up with his good self and a couple of other friends from here ... he he he I got a giggle out of that :P love and higgest bugs Jaynee

Orphani

16 years 10 months ago

congratulations on the

congratulations on the spotlight, your back where you belong .but of course there never was any doubt.HURRAH!

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Barry

I think I missed it again not sure if I am still there havent been to the home page yet lol .... thanks for letting me know (hugs) love and higgest bugs jayne x x x

docmaverick

16 years 10 months ago

Too often....

...I only write about the "calm before the storm"...or, it's "aftermath". You bravely chose the "storm"...and I applaud, you ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Doc

I am the one always calm as In the middle of storms I am usually soaking it up .. I love the anticipation of it, the beginning of it all of It really LOL ... when it storms as long as no one gets hurt I am in my glory lol ... happy that you liked it my friend hugs love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

wow

Beautiful! This poem flowed very well,and it felt like i was there myself in middle of a storm! Wonderful, elizabeth

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

You know I am always happy when you like my poems ... this one was just a bit of fun and still needs a edit ... thanks for looking in on me with me round looking at everyones poetry tonight take care much love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

believe

16 years 10 months ago

Great stuff

Im actually in the middle of a storm as I write this, 100M ton of bush soil coming in with the 100k wind and rain from out west, this poem reads like the weather out side, lots of fun enjoyed it a lot Ray

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Ray

its storming here too hun where are you? I am mid north coast NSW , there was just a earthquake in melbourne all over the telly I cannot believe it the world outside is tearing apart and the earth is shaking in melbourne the weathers gone insane ... kind regards love Jayne x x

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

Oh, Seren(e), you live in

Oh, Seren(e), you live in such a beautiful mind. It's when the furniture gets tossed about that makes for interesting displays, electrically charged with wilding words. lol. There is that silence that precedes a storm, you can't help but feel it, and there's always an eerie light and ya know something wicked this way comes. Priestly pants on poles? Now there's an image that'll hang around. Hugs of love to you & yours my dear Lady Jayne. ~A

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Anna

the furniture gets tossed inside there more than you know, malestrom some days ...and that slience before a storm always makes me pause there is nothing like being outback before a big storm even the wildlife go quite except the rain birds of course lol they are always in the background with their woootwooo thats exactly what it sounds like ... and it makes me goosebump everytime lol Used to go do round up every spring for my uncle,it was amazing riding out and hearding them all in,it felt like you had been working at the end of the day my ass used to get so sore I would lay down all night, country girl but coast country girl, they work harder for it out west, and there was nothing like a big storm on flatland its an awesome sight nothing compares to it ... pmsl at the priestly pants on poles thats gonna be remembered something you dont see everyday ... you know everytime you call me Lady Jayne I smile and remember my Nana , she called me that when I was growing up (hugs) Love and higgest bugs Jaynee x x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Jayne:

For a moment I thought you would be writing about the end of the world...But thank goodness it was this beautiful poem, to exercise your precious writing abilities. Nice description, excellent pacing and wording, smooth as always, and of course, very vivid. You keep getting better by the minute. Love, Hugo

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Hugo ...

I am always happy when you like my poems ... as I love your mind and poetry ... thanks for the read and the comment ... will be out more again today reading and will see what wonders you cooked up for us :0 take care of you and yours love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

I just had to love this poem when I read the bit about the pries

Hi Spotlight queen, I am afraid I can hardly keep up with your prolific writing, yay you!... I just had to love this poem when I read the bit about the priests pants... my rediculous sense of humour rejoiced. & my pathetic sense of sensibility wanted to point out that if there was a flood it would be crazy to be in a cellar no?... but I knew even then you were just having fun, just undid the mgic for a sec & distracted me... Otherwise bravo, what fun. Cheers Anni~ "Making the decision to have a child is momentous. It is to decide forever to have your heart go walking around outside your body". ~Elizabeth Stone

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Anni

I actually asked people to stop nominating me for spotlight due to the backlash from certain parts of neopoet lol I have had spotlight more times than baked dinners nowdays and i am focusing on more improving my scribbles , not for any reason that I find a joy in writing and gives me something to focus on ... Glad you got a laugh out of the priests pants ... just blasphemy isn't it (my dad is an elder in the church is taking it with him on sunday lol)but nature holds no favours for anyone unfortunately lol been there done that with the cellar, though for me it was under a shed actually a hay shed lol.. it was hide under the shed or get hit by flying roofs harvesters and farm tools , we had water up to our chins ... it was hide from the chaos outside or sit in 7 inches of water ... the water was softer and I can swim ;) lol take care Jayne x x

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

Hope you are well, you are flourishing here, I am enjoying your

Ah Jayney girl, it is tough at the top, it's a funny thing that whole spotlight thing, I know what you mean, there was a phase I was there too often for my own comfort. I am happy quiet in the backwaters reading the lovely folk here, how I love it. This was a joy (even more that your pa takes it on Sunday, love that!), & what a story about having to hide in the hay shed, were you little? Must have been pretty nerve wracking. Hope you are well, you are flourishing here, I am enjoying your constant improvements, well done. Still can't seem to keep up with anyone, but it's ok, if they don't forgive me I guess there's nothing I can do. I do my best all round. I'll be away with my beautiful otters for the holidays, & I need that, we seem to have such a horrid time if we don't see each other for more than a week, so more than a weekend will be heaven. Hope your holidays will be lovely, if the weather sits, been pelting down here last few days (in keeping with your write), last night was a dooozy! Cheers Anni~ "The personal life deeply lived always expands into truths beyond itself". Anais Nin:

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Anni its not being at the

Anni its not being at the top that bothers me at the moment lol its the petty crap that came with it , just not able to cope with it at the moment and thought if I am not there, they can't moan and piss and whinge lol and at the end of the day I started here as a hobby, that its become something else was a great surprise and no small joy losing music was a shattering thing for me, as you know being a performer demands energy and a lot of it ... I miss it but hope in time to go back ... with a renewed vigor I am bursting to bust out lol you know what I mean just sing with the universe and cleanse all the crap ... Hun we all have lives and cannot always be here and I am sure there is nothing to forgive, we give what we can when we can , its all any of us can do and weather my god I have never seen a dust storm like the one we are in the middle of at the moment I an further up the coast from sydney and its still here not quite clearing yet but see that its clearing in the city which i am happy for so many people got so sick down there today ... this summer is going to be a killer ... I am not looking forward to it at all Take care Jayne x x

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

Hi Jayne, a super quick dip

Hi Jayne, a super quick dip on the internet, I'm away & about to head to South Australia tomorrow (first holiday in a long time, but with kids in tow, might need a rest on return!?)... I had no idea you were copping flack, I'm sorry to hear it. I thought that was my prob. a little while back ... we probably all get a bit of flack if we get a bit more attention I suppose. I just tend to try to not be too concerned about time in the Spotlight, it is a strange mistress public attention, can be fickle & can bring out the best & worst in people. Somehow I managed to miss your circumstances, but I am sorry to hear you have been disturbed by any hassles here, it's difficult when there is trouble in paradise... I loved this place so much, but when there was difficulty it was heart breaking, I don't think I'll ever feel as at home here. I really feel for you about the losing your music, I have had a few conversations on that topic this weekend (with other muso's/performers). I have also had to minimize performances in the last 6 months & I don't think many people understand how devastating that is... & it DOES come down to energy... May we both regain our vigour & get back on the stage... sooooon!!! Think it'll be a slow recovery for me, probably for you as well. I have been finding it harder to write as well though (different challenges to you), & that is the first time in my LIFE I've been robbed of that outlet, it is awful & a part of me feels like having a tantrum & stomping & carrying on about it, but in reality I know I must deal with it in grace, knowing much worse things happen & I still have abilities, they are just more limited than they've ever been for a while. I know how lucky I am, I am fortunate to be so well loved & to have had such a full life anyway up until now. Anyway, I'm glad to hear you haven't let the Neo politics get you down, you seem more prolific than ever, don't ever forget it's all about taste & voting can be dependent on so many elements. Clearly you have become extremely popular, people who love you will continue to do so whether you are spotlit or not. I have been so impressed at the way you have worked so hard & progressed with your poetry here in such a short time really. You should be proud of yourself... I think you know it though & I am glad, as you should, you wont let it get you down. Hope the weather settles soon, it's been incredibly wet down here, tons of rain, been the wettest season for many years, good for the water circ's. Still we have warnings in my little town that there are likely to be severe bushfires again this year... poor old world. Keep that holy pants flag flying! Maybe we'll manage to clean our polutting arses up in this wicked western world! Cheers Anni Cheers Anni~ "The personal life deeply lived always expands into truths beyond itself". Anais Nin:

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Anni , Thanks for your

Dear Anni , Thanks for your message , I know what your saying I try not to let the little things get to me and always at the end of it,I wont lower myself to their level, people that play in the mud get dirty lol I am a straight shooter and I have never said I am perfect far from it lol but at the end of it you cant let it get to you because life is bigger and harsher than this place could ever be ... lol ... I miss my music so much but as always its ever present I still listen and I have my partner playing guitar and my kids nearly all of them want to play guitar so my passion is still indulged though vicariously lol ... you take care enjoy your holiday ,I am in newcastle at the hospital so I guess I cant call it a holiday but I have caught up with BossCombat and our other friend that he shares a place with kind regards Jayne :)

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Can't believe I missed this one!

How on earth did I miss this wonderful write? You have such a way with describing Ma's nature. I know that you are having some trouble with the idea of spotlight and how many times you are in it, but it is popular consensus. If there are others that do not agree, maybe they should vote more often, and try to equal your writing skills. Maybe if they spent more time at working on their writes instead of griping, they would be in the spotlight. I have no problem with anyone having the spotlight when they deserve it. And you certainly do! You are right, Ma doesn't show favoritism, she gives it to us all, no matter who you are. Great stuff, and let those who don't agree, fly away with the storm! ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Gee

Thank you for your kind words , LOL and I am done with the weather tonight, I got one I been working on for a couple of weeks and hubby gave me the go ahead to post it lol wasn't sure what he would say but he said yes its a little naughty ;) lol sooo bring on the weekend the weathers warming up and so is the poetry thanks for your support Gee and I am glad you liked this one ... its a funny one I love it lol the priests pants get me everytime,naughty sense of humour I have ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

jetwave48

16 years 10 months ago

i like this… reminds me of

i like this... reminds me of seeing a couple of summers ago when i was a hurricane ith my aunt. thumbs up

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Jetwave

Thanks for the read I dont think I have seen your face before so if your new ? welcome to neopoet :) ... thanks again take care will be round to read you later , and will have a look at what you have been doing Kind regards Jayne

odd molly

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Jayne. You are the

Dearest Jayne. You are the most wonderful writer and poet. This one made me smile because to me there is nothing more wonderful than a storm especially if you are on an island or so. I know they can be dangerous but if they arent they are nice. Lovely lovely poem and congratulations a hundred times with colourful ballons and happy music and a lovely cake to your spotlight.. Much Love. o molly

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Molly

Thank you sooo much *big Smile* ... I always get a rush when people like my scribbles ... never more so than with this is ... was meant to show that nature holds no favourites and lol she has a sense of humour (hug) Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

Nordic cloud

16 years 10 months ago

A whistling storm that almost took my thoughts on a trip

You are aware, I presume, that pants, in the English I know, are underpants? We called them knickers when I was little, up to the waist and they could almost be pulled down to the knees, in bottle green school uniform thick cotton!! My mother called them kicks, or they were referred to as smalls, or scanties as the case may be! (And THOSE were the one's my little sister of 2yrs put five pairs of on one day. I never forgot how PROUD she was of having managed to wear them all together, she could hardly walk down the staircase!!) One almost makes the sheets into bed sheets following the pants, and well.......! Well the priests 'souls' were lost at the same time as his undies poor man. Apart from the humour, this was a whistling storm that almost took my thoughts on a trip, screaming round in the hurricane of your words. I hope you never have to experience your thoughts here; maybe you feel you are in some ways and that's why you wrote it, that's right drive out the daemons of negativity and establish the peace of silence in your life, wishing you good health for ever more dear Jayne, and love from Ann P.S. And all the while the sun shines outside at 21%C, in late September so beautifully hot and light and lovely. Isend it to you as a flower of a thought like a brilliant refection from the petal of a bright red poppy.

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Ann

LOL opppps I didnt realise that pants over there was underpants ... woopps .... here we call them undies , bikini briefs or boxers lol ... but my great grandma who I was blessed to know, wore the old fashioned bloomers they had enough material in them to make a skirt lol or maybe a shirt, I remember thinking that she wasnt that big and why were her pants that humungous ... LOL and kicks here are shoes ... and I remember my mum calling pants knickers , she would say to go get her knickers off the airer,she was a nurse and always hurrying here and there doing something There was one piece of reality in this poem the line that says a roof was walking without any soles ? that line we had a huge storm where we are living now, we have been here nearly ten years,and the business across the road ? its roof blew off and literally walked its way down the road lol and we all saw it ... the wind is howling we had another dust storm today but the sky is clear tonight so fingers crossed we will have a nice sunny day tomorrow and the wind will go ... the days are getting warmer we have already had a 35 degree day here and its only going to get worse i think this summer is going to be a sorcher ... you take care and thanks for your wonderful message and sharing some of your life ... always a pleasure darling Ann (hug) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

Jayne, I remember a movie-On

Jayne, I remember a movie-On the Beach-about the end of the world after a nuclear war. Australia is the last place on earth that can sustain life. It was/is a haunting story/movie...Now, I'm reading that Australia is the first continent suffering the ill-effects of global warming. I don't know anything for sure, all I know watching the storm of red dust is devastating for me, concerned for my extended family. Reminds me of the tons of ashes spewn when Mt. St. Helen erupted. Much love to you and yours, Jayne. Do take care. We are such a small world. ~A

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Anna

We are seeing the effects of climate change already in our country we are going through one of the longest droughts that even the aborigines cannot remember that says something they have been here for thousands of years ... our country has gotten hotter and hotter every year , maybe I am getting old but I can see the water shortages in queensland they are talking about recycled water and you know what that means its getting desperate ... somethings gotta be done or we are all fucked lol simple as ... the rivers are drying up we are seeing more and more accounts of algae that pollute our rivers the river mouths are being clogged with crap .. I could go on for hours , but I have brought my kids up like I was, farm girl respect the land take care of it , its all I can do ... but here in australia they are raising awareness in schools already about climate change both my kids have done assignments on climate change this year ... we are ok I am not looking forward to summer at the moment its swinging between a hot summer and then at night its the middle of winter again ... the weather is mad lol love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

marich7

16 years 10 months ago

i like storms

awesome read. i enjoyed every bit of it. i felt like i was there.(which says alot for me because i usually sleep through storms :P)

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Marich

lol glad you got a kick out of my storm lol going to trying a few more like this though with a little different theme thanks for the read and the stars kind regards Jayne :P

Nordic cloud

16 years 10 months ago

35%C is getting too hot for me.

Yes I nearly added Bloomers but then I thought they were those knee length lace edged white knickerbockers, things that they wore in the 19thC, which they are but we still used bloomers sometimes in the 40's. We had a group that met in my house in Flatdal, we created our own philosophy and part of it, to make the story short!!!! Was the fact that we had a pair of underpants that would have fitted the largest person you have ever seen, with these, we had enormous fun, one time auctioning them off to each other. There were, of course many other items, some hand-knitted socks that also would have fit size 80 or huge, much to big for human feet, knitted by an old lady to sell at a parish Christmas sale, and as E's feet are large I thought oh super and bought them, I tried to find out what size they were but nobody knew - well nobody can were them, perhaps in bed when they wish to visit the trolls in their dreams, so we had a great laugh about them too. One of the other items was one that I made to illustrate the shape and size of a Dr. Seifart, who had a 'fuglebryst',( he was a therapist who has a whole story for himself so funny too) a chest the shape of a birds, this was put on rather like a brassier which was very effective!! More laughter. There were a number of posthumous members including Kong Olav, for his 'fistelstemme', high pitched voice! I staggered home by air with two huge seaweed shapes that still hang on my wall in Flatdal, strange baggage, but then one time we came home with so many stones from Spain and one year from Corsica with the suitcases full of wallnuts!!!! I had to send my clothes home by post to make room for them!!!! The group's founder member was the now posthumous Dodo! He was so kind of nature, let us capture him and eat him up, unable to fly as his wings were so tiny either side of his cumbersome body, and we ate and we ate until there were no more of them. We felt him worthy of 'gjenreisning' ascension as you might say, and therefore chose him, as did the authorities when they needed an animal to represent all extinct animals." Dead as a dodo." But in our hands with speeches, discussions, plays, museums etc. we dressed up in the evenings and with a glass of wine and a good meal, after having walked up 3000 ft. during the day, we set to with our wonderfully absurd dissertations and chat. That was great, now we are only three of the group left, and it has cooled off to whimper, ach wheel such is life, or death. But wow we were all good comedians and painted, read, wrote, sculpted, all sorts and that made for a beautifully absurd group to make fun with. Now we can laugh at your underpants instead! Love Ann

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Ann My great

Dearest Ann My great greadmama was a very old fashioned woman a mother of 18 children,She had two children by her first husband (who died in world war 2) and then her second husband was the father of the other 16 ... lol she wore bloomers right through the 70's and I mean those big old fashioned ones with the lace on the bottom of them lol I am not joking ... and wore them till the day she died ... I still remember those bloomers they were massive ... I got such a laugh out of your group I was once in a choir for years and in the end of every night it was high jinxs and laughter, always, it was good fun I miss my music and singing but eventually when I am well enough will get back to it ... When I was with my ex husband I used to make ceramics, still can, but it takes steady hands and at the moment I am about as steady as a sinking ship so another thing that will wait till I improve , though poetry has become such a huge love , and some of my poems I have turned into music with boredom setting in lol ... thanks for sharing I got such a thrill out of your story ... you know you remind me of my dad hes in a walking group and they go out twice a week , fitness and friendship they call their walks ... its very cold here again today the wind is howling but ? no dust as yet with any luck we can get a dust free day and get some washing dry .... we have had trouble getting clothes dry, hang them out and twenty minutes later whatever colour they are is covered by red dust lol Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

weirdelf-test

16 years 10 months ago

totally earned spotlight

not just a treasure for me to read but pleasure to see received. well my very quick quip won't take a page, just love and thankyou, kind regards, Jean, meow, bite, purr, yowl and perfect body language express all

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Jean

You havent been with us very long but you have become a part of this place and to get your message of support means the world to me thanks so much ... sorry to be long in replying was laid up today was feeling like unchanged kitty litter LOL you take care huni and I will be round reading later to see what kitty adventures you have cooked up for us lately (huggles) Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

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