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Bleeding Hearts

The house is in shambles, rock foundation
crooked and leaning to the left, whitewash
wearing thin.  Flowers hide the slanting stoop
and Bleeding Hearts that drip jewel-like from
green vines cover over the dissolving
dream—pretty, so very, very pretty,
but so very, very temporary.

 Here you are all dressed in white, like a bride,
out on the porch among the Bleeding Hearts
in see-through white lace—but what’s under there,
underwear clean enough for a car wreck—
pretty enough to show, not a teensy
bit wrinkled or a little bit smelly?
Are we in need of a wash and line dry—
to air out the slimy facts, so to speak?
Or do you flat out need a change?  So, change
the color, but don’t wear white, for God’s sake!

Here you stand, all dressed up in correctness,
atop sagging stairs with flowers and beads
and camouflage—and Bleeding Hearts starting
to droop in summer heat.  You call for change.
Well, get the emperor some new clothes and
paint the house red.

— deelilah, Sep 20, 2009

About This Poem

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Region, Country: Northwest USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.E. Cummings, Robert W. Service, Emily Dickenson

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deelilah

deelilah

16 years 8 months ago

Hi there, Lyn

Thank you for the wonderful and encouraging comment. Where is Wafer Valley? I am sitting right now in Napa Valley picking up wine from Fetzer to take to Minnesota. I have been to Sandpoint, grew up in Spokane area (Colfax), then later had restaurants there. I know Chatteroy is around there somewhere. (Where?) I'll have to look it up. Come back and visit soon. Deelilah
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 8 months ago

Well hello, Julie

It's great to see you---and that's a super picture. The last time we spoke we talked about pictures. I missed you, your quick wit and passionate poetry. I really hate it when my friends go away from neo. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem',, 'funny and pretty', an interesting take. Deelilah
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 8 months ago

I didn’t mean to dismiss

I didn't mean to dismiss it as "pretty and funny", It was pretty as you wrote and structured it, plus you used pretty in your first stanza, and when you went serious and blunt, I found the amusement. And you won't convince me that you weren't amused when you were writing it, even if the title and topic was more serious. Which is all GOOD, I was a tad tired when I wrote my comment, sorry if that made it sound unpersonal. I realy did feel it was a good way to start my afternoon, I had just gotten up and online and it was a great first of the day read, and did set the tone for more to come. Thanks again, sorry for the off comment. So I guess we have BOTH ventured to post our pic's, how very brave we are, LOL heheehe. I am glad to be back to, also glad that the reason why I left has improved, I had faith it would. Julie D.D.
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 8 months ago

Julie, Julie

I liked your comment, didn't find it dismissive at all. Actually, those were the words my husband used. I added the line 'so very, very temporary' because he thought it went from pretty to funny (I call it satirical) too fast. No I'm just glad you found it enjoyable enough to read and comment on. I always like to hear from you. Deelilah
L

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Deelilah

This is a great whimsical write. it felt like the reader was there with you. Descriptive and colorful. glad I couldn't smell those undies though, lol. Well done it was great. Love Lyz.XX
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Lyz

I am glad you liked the poem. That means it stood up on its own. Being from Australia, you couldn't know it had some political undertones and symbolism going on. That was my goal---to hide the underlying meaning---in whimsy, just like Lewis Carol, who is huge on my favorite list. Thanks for coming by. Deelilah
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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Hello

Well, well, well. No I didn't know. I still liked it though. Sounded picturesque and I was not sure about painting your house red though. Lol. who am I to judge.Well done you clever girl. Love Lyz. X
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

hello deelilah

I, too, thought your poem was picturesque and whimsical. But we sure do have some dirty laundry that should be taken care of. Hooray for Lewis Carroll! Well done! Always, Cat
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 8 months ago

Thanks Cat

Yes, I do have a fascination with Lewis Carroll, his characters, his allegory, and his poetry. I see that I've been misspelling his name---so embarrassed I am. What did I do before a spell checker or friends to read who can spell, but Lewis Carroll, really? Good luck on the laundry. We don't have a washer big enough for that load. Thanks for reading. I'm glad you were entertained. You were, weren't you? Always, Deelilah