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Fragments

Pouring into night
heat and cool rest
to blend

A smell
abstruing sense,
wearing of day,
sliding into an envelope
sent to shadow-lands,
I submerge to rest
in jasmine,
glimmered to dream
slung in a hammock,
bedazzled in the fire of illusion,
I lay in wonder of the cross

A lone cicada
trilled,
a twilight anthem settling
to a cadence of love,
drifting and distracted
by darken descendants,
phantoms of Grey
with no light's knife,
they twix the mix
of palate,
Ocher hues spread,
merging to black
swallowed,upended,
in the soft line
of the horizons dome,
mixing paradise
with the stars

A spruce air seduces taste,
to find,
this voids seduction
is to breath in heaven,
teasing to gasp
in this beauty,
and suckling to taste
in the delectable Grey,
becoming a twin to moon,
I am struck,
as half-light bewitches me
and swings my hammock,
to the milky way,
the southern cross
cradles my head,
and jasmine visions
are overcome,
listing in an untouchable bliss

I lay down,
abed of light
embraced by a universe
of my own making,
dream knitting
fibrils of saffron time

— Seren, Sep 17, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Seren

Such a hammock ride, it has cradled the inner soul to release such a beautiful myriad of emotions. Reflection, soothing, a sadness, an absorbing, senses dulled yet aware, kind of read. This was such a lovely poem. What you have written, I could fill the page with what I have read, but I cant, can I. This has actually a hypnotic feel, it sort of soothed me as I read. I had better stop. Lovely Love to u from Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Lyz

I am shocked by the amount of messages on this lol I am staggered to be honest , I seriously didnt know if I had gotten this one right , just goes to show what I know huh ... glad you enjoyed our hammock ride my friend (hugs) and it is our lol southern cross and all that :P huggles Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
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Orphani

16 years 8 months ago

you are getting better, and

you are getting better, and better, and better. with every writing .your visions infuse us into the blend of reality enhanced in the palm of your hand--blessing us with a glimps into the craft of your creativity, and imaginative, playful, and sensuous style. thanks for the passed cup -i know you are pleased- revel in the beauty of your eyes, for that is your strength. ........o
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Barry

I dont know what to say to be honest ... LOL ... I wrote this the other night when I was sick as a dog, thank you for the beautiful compliment , I am just a scribbler that hopes to touch just one person ,am just glad you all enjoy these ... thanks for being here with us love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 8 months ago

Fragments

Jayne Your visions from another paralel dimension amazing my friend between worlds just glimpses do we get but to be able to create this beauty the creativity visions my friend. beautiful sensual Electric blue
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Magz

I love that you find a beauty in my words, and I hope you find a peace because thats what this is meant to do,to find a inner peace and drift away from reality and all the pain it brings with it ... take care huni higgest bugs of love Jayne x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

To dazzle mine eyes...

Your palette befuddles my brain and I see the dawn and dark of you. Ahhh, but the mysteries of the universe, will be plundered by those who dare! I am so glad that Spring is there for you. We are just in our fall here and winter not far off. I didn't get out as much as I would liked this summer, but am feeling a little better these days and will try to get out with Dancer and chase some rabbits soon. I know she misses it. See that? You make me want to go out and see Mother, for myself. Color washed eyes see better.~ Gee.
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Sir Gee

Spring is here with a vengance , its 35 degrees here today more a summer day than anything , but I have to say I am enjoying the heat, I am always cold lately so Its nice to be warm ... though if this an indicator of summer we are in for a bad one ... thanks so much for your comment hun I am glad this little write made you want to get back out to mother ... I cant go in the sun at the moment so I am looking forward to getting out again ... though i can go out into the cool of the night and enjoy the stars so there is one consolation lol and look what happens when I do :P love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 8 months ago

Fragments!

Hi Seren! Don't quite know what I was expecting - but from the title, probably something a little negative - broken in fact! What I have gained is something quite delightful and refreshing; "Pouring into night heat and cool rest" I too. Just one little niggle though... The changing of tenses throws me a bit. 1st Stanza Present tense, 2nd past... Otherwise - impeccable! Well done boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Boni

So happy you liked this one ... first off I'll explain the tenses ... the title says fragments and well this is sort of a dream lol was I was laying on my bed and looking out the window at the twilight and well I remember night falling but then the rest is well fragments lol perceptions and this was my perception of the dream past present got all mixed up really .. thanks heaps for the comment hugs I am always so happy when you like mine like i enjoy your poems love Jayne x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Seren

I like this poem, especially those verses about the cosmic feelings, the awe, and that sliding into that comfortable envelope sent to a shadow land. Wow! ... bedazzled by the fire of illusion, I lay in wonder of the cross... Excellent, my dear friend. This is a poem after my own heart. Applause! Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Hugo

What can I say but thank you thats the most beautiful thing you could say ... so I will *curtsey* and hopefully can come up with something just as riveting today I am up and about again so will see what I can whip up lol or finish :P ...thank you my dear friend I am always so happy when you like my poetry (hug) Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
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Orphani

16 years 8 months ago

congratulations on the

congratulations on the assent of fragments to its rightful place among the stars. you have proved beyond a shadow of a doubt why your work achievs the success it does.your gift to transform words into a beautiful tapestry of your imaginitive vision.I know the honor will be yours and your vindication complete.thank you for sharing your gift with us and for your tireless inspiration tward excellence.with all due respect and admiration. I am proud to share a small place with you here at Neopoet . may your art fill the world for many years to come, and i'm sure I speak for all here who really know you. Again congratulations for one of your finest works.We share the joy of your accomplishments. .....................o
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Barry

I am gathering from your comment this one made it to spotlight ? thats wonderful ... thank you for letting me know otherwise I would have been none the wiser, shining and I wasnt even here to see it lol damn ;) I just hope I can live up to your words my friend (hug) I have always been just a scribler only writing seriously since March this year so in reality I am timewarps away from everyone else here, in some respects I still have so much to learn ... but I will give it my best shot ;) lmao love and higgest bugs Jayne
SM

Steele Massey

16 years 8 months ago

Wow

The poem is so entrancing it is hard to focus and simply read the words. That is the mark of great poetry. It bypasses the mind and goes straight to the heart. Wonderful read. Thank you.
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Steele

Thank you for your wonderful comment and i am so glad you found the emotions running through this one, cause its there ... dont know what to say but thank you I am overwhelmed at everyones response to this one lol but am sitting here smiling like a cat lol kind regards love jayne x x
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ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

fragments

enda, patrick collins. wow wee wat a write you indeed are getting better and better is this a recent write any one would be proud to call this there own to many good lines to pick them out it is class i am going to have to read this again and again this is what we all should strive to write its so well put together did it take long , congrates seren ziggyyyyyyyyy
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Patrick

I wrote this one in a hurry the other night did a small edit and put it on here , probably took about 5-6 hours all up,and its not finished yet not by a long shot they never are lol ... thank you for your wonderful reception to this one its always great to know when you touch someone ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Anna

And you are still one of my sources of inspiration , if I write something beautiful its only because you and others like you inspire it , I often feel privelaged to be allowed to write next to such writers as you and Cat and all the other people here who inspire me , and you do .. thanks for the read and the comment and the beast is tamed this worked a treat;) sent him to the far reachs of space for some anger management lol ;) love you higgest bugs Jayne x x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest one

***** You always amaze me... just when I think you have reached your best, you go and surprise me by writing something better! My favorite lines are: in the delectable Grey, becoming a twin to moon, I am struck, as half-light bewitches me and swings my hammock, to the milky way, the southern cross cradles my head, and jasmine visions are overcome, listing in an untouchable bliss just one little tiny tiny thing... watch your spaces after a comma and before the next word. Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Cat

You are one of my favourite writers and everytime you enjoy my poetry I am yet again amazed at how much of thrill I get, when you like them I am always happy and I am content I have done my job hun I am never sure about the spaces between the commas so any help would be appreciated punctuation has never been one of my strong points , but I am trying to improve,this ones far from finished yet, I had the dream in the afternoon and spent the next 5-6 hours writing this and putting it all back together as best i could at the time , I have been in bed the last two days LOL not even neopoet could raise me I was down for the count but I am up again and feeling a little better.. will be out reading today sometime so will see what you have been up to , have missed you hun(hug) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
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odd molly

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Jayne.This is the

Dearest Jayne. This is the best one I have read from you. It is a wonderful wonderful write and I am so happy that you share of your special and unique talent and sweet heart. I loved to be there with you and I felt warmth and I smiled. May the light always shine on you. Love. o molly
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Molly

I am so glad to write something you enjoy , so often you amaze ,amuse and bemuse me with your poetry I am just glad I could return the favour ... thank you for the beautiful compliment (hug) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
ID

Ink Dragon

16 years 8 months ago

Jayne,

my fav lines: I submerge to rest in jasmine, glimmered to dream slung in a hammock, bedazzled in the fire of illusion, I lay in wonder of the cross great poem, really felt the mood (your strong point, conveying emotions, sharing experiences with us). I noticed one or two little apostrophes had fled the words they should have stuck with, but am too tired right now for this kind of thing. Will return with suggestions, corrections and all that bling. Still taking no stars? **** Yours, ~Nina
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Nina

If I have a talent for writing emotions you have the talent for writing truths and making them beautiful , I am so glad you enjoyed this one, the stars arent important anymore hun , never really were except as an indictor of if I was on the right track , this one was writen in a hurry and I still have to work on the punctuation lol I wrote it posted it and crashed for two days lol ... but am feeling better today so with luck I will be round later reading commenting and seeing what you all have been up to ... much love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x P.s the blinging would be much apprecaited have been hell tired the last week hence the two day rest lol(huggles) good to see you round darlin' have missed you
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Unknownquantity

16 years 8 months ago

Loved it Mum its awesome but

Loved it Mum its awesome but you already knew that love you moree Bethany
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Elloooo naughty one , I

Elloooo naughty one , I thought you where checking emails ????? lol anyhoo I knew you loved it darlin love you mostestestestestestestestestestestest sooo I win :) lmao love you my darlin mwahhhhhhhhh Mama
doorman

doorman

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Jayne

This one drops into mind with wild power. More untamed than some of your other writes, I think. It seems to me to be the sort of write one's lost control over,- and there it is, a beautiful creature. Be careful should you want to edit this. A few lines I found extra tasty; Pouring into night heat and cool rest to blend with no light’s knife, they twix the mix of palate, my own making, dream knitting fibrils of saffron time Thanks, Jayne. Yours, Espen.
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Espen

LOL I just finished saying to Hugo that I am going to have to watch him and I read this one ... I did loose control over this write what you see here is a very much edited poem , when I wrote it it was about four pages long lmao and well this was the end result of the four pages lol .. thanks for the comment its always a pleasure to see you round my pages ... dont know that i am going to edit this one too much more will look at it when I am feeling better lol might muck it up love and hugs Jayne x x x
doorman

doorman

16 years 8 months ago

Four legged fragment

I think you should type in those four pages, close your eyes, hit the submit button,- come rain or shine. I'm curious. Yours, Espen.
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

LOL ok I too am a curious creature

For your reading pleasure (and to satisfy your curiousity) when I get home I will type the rest out of my journal and blog it for you lol way too long for stream ... but dont say I didn't warn you lol ... love and hugs Jayne x x
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Brilliant JayCee

You're a true poet and you sure know how to captivate us...Wonderful...I've never been on a hammock, I'd probably fall off anyway! Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Xena

Ive been slowly doing some old edits and I am going to do a couple a week so you will get to see stuff you have never seen before lol hope you enjoy love and big hugs JayCee x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Hey JayCee

I'm thinking of doing that myself. I have a lot of good poems from when I first joined Neo that I could greatly improve, thanks to the help from people like you. I have grown so much with writing in general that I feel I’m now ready to re-write some of my poetry submitted many months ago. I think, rather than create new poems; I could learn a lot more from the ones that I’ve already written. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Ive seriously made some not

Ive seriously made some not so great poems into at least satisfactory ... and its fun to go back and think WTF was i thinking lol yup I do that sometimes too love and big hugs JayCee (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)