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THE ADDICT / ATTIC [homophones] read comments

THE ADDICT / ATTIC

No light in the addict / attic
And the handrails ,  preformed to contradict
The safety , I have ask of it

I place my hand to balance my weight
Loose screws singing ?
And each step has it’s own sound and meaning
I am trying to temper my movements
Or stop my heart from beating
Separating  my conscious from my soul 
Excusing my mind form , believing

Noninclusive  capacity of  my  world
Encompassing what little of my life I control

These steps , that I climb
Are the thoughts of my day in time
The handrail , that balanced my weight
Is the resolve  a solitude  
The equations , I must face

In the addict / attic
I figure  ,my next day
In the addict
Pages’
Wrote
Turned
Saved
Reexamined, when the handrail and the steps debate
Supporting the foundation
Of questions that I must face

OK this was my crazy attempt to twist words that are homophones [ADDICT /ATTIC]. I wanted the read to think [basically were dose a addict go to use , but the attic may be anywhere his/her room ,basement etc.] so I thought if I were to use attic somewhere in the poem in would have been confusing. This was my first try at this style , and the vodka was helping me [Big smile].


— press, Sep 17, 2009

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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi

Did u mean Attic? I was a bit lost, Addict in drugs or Attic at the top of the house? I can see the two meanings in both and I liked the way this is written, but I am sorry if I got lost and I am sure u will straighten it out. Story line, wording, yes I enjoyed. Thanks, Love Lyz. XX
press

press

16 years 8 months ago

Hey ladys Lyz & Annie

OK this was my crazy attempt to twist words that are homophones [ADDICT /ATTIC]. I wanted the read to think [basically were dose a addict go to use , but the attic may be anywhere his/her room ,basement etc.] so I thought if I were to use attic somewhere in the poem in would have been confusing. This was my first try at this style , and the vodka was helping me [Big smile]. Thanks Lyz & Annie. Maybe I will try this style again. LOV2U PRESS
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

hello

I see what you are doing here and feel it is very clever. Good work. Always, Cat
press

press

16 years 8 months ago

Hey cat Thanks

Lord ? this one almost got away from me . Thanks cat for bring it back [smile] . I have some grade A [Catnip] for you [Big smile] LOV2U VODKA & PRESS