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Forgive me. I need a new alphabet, and I see you have been cut into a hundred pieces and thrown into the ocean. You are waiting for love to rise from your foam? I assure you, she won't. So why don't you let me gather up your pieces like raw manna and make words out of them. A finger between your teeth! {your mouth needed a stem!} A heart in your eye socket! Your tongue in the hollow of your throat! You will be spoken again, you will be on everyone's lips. Wouldn't you like that? You are illegible right now, no one can read you. But I plunge my hands into you, my new alphabet, and I will mangle you sweetly, until I have formed new words that everyone understands. People will read a breast rocked in the cradle of your arms, and they will weep. Wouldn't you like that? May I ask how this happened to you? Was it a man? Did he untune your spine, did he unstring your hair? . No, I tested the blade of the horizon against my tongue. I thought no none was watching, but split-tongued angels swam around me. They sang, and their voices were not lovely. They opened their mouths, and I expected whole chords to spill out, whole octaves to arch their backs like audible rainbows. But their voices were deep and broken, and sweetly mangled, like a braid of a girl who has been running, running... I tested the blade of the horizon against my tongue, and they touched their own split-tongues and remembered. They circled around me, their eyes haloed by sleepless lids, watching, watching... They can taste one part blood in one hundred parts sky.
— Diatom Shells, Sep 15, 2009

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yenti

yenti

16 years 8 months ago

Diatom

A lovely piece with a depth of the Ocean that has been filled with jumbled letters , fear not they flowed well as a lulaby to the ears. The only place that there was a problem was putting two AND's in, they need to return to the Ocean and all will be Swell should I Pun, Yours Ian.T (and) I see you have been cut into a hundred pieces (and)Then thrown into the ocean.
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 8 months ago

hello

I don't think we have been formally introduced hi my name is kyrie. I love your suggestions and comment I am very appreciative thank you! love -shells
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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Diatom Shells

This is a very strong write, a really poignant piece. I enjoyed this. You always bring to ur writes ,a beauty of words. Quite a talent you have, and I am glad you allow us to share. Love Lyz.XX
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 8 months ago

hello

thank you for reading it this poem is kinda one of my favorite strange web of thoughts. -shells
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 8 months ago

Create and imagine the word in your eyes...

Diatom... What can I say, this really is an amazing write full of brilliant descriptives and wordplay then tinged with imagination and creativity beyond compare. You could create your own universal language here that any and all could understand and feeling.. collated together as a jumble and mass of alphabetic spagetti until we all burp bubbles of tomato sauce... and we'd all just understand it! You have touched the sky and tasted the rainbow in a stunning plethora of letters, words, sentences and paragraphs full of zest, verve that explores the senses, expands the mind and ventures the world with a grand finesse. Now what to call this eloquent masterpiece? Hmmm... not sure but I might just call it... Cognizance or maybe in my own mind set Capriccio. In reality I don't think i could name such an awe inspring piece. you really have out done yourself here. Worldwide Freeride :)
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 8 months ago

hello you!

so....I created a world in the milky way where I dwell and I am forever immortal because time does not exist. I like how you get to the bottom of poems that intrigue your interest and give truthful observation to the action of a write thank you I believe I could never out do myself I would really hope not or else I will have to plunge into the earth and and return as a dogwood.
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Orphani

16 years 8 months ago

you have this intense

you have this intense imagination that spins out unnearvingly dark metaphors that are seemingly disjointed and abstactively cryptic but then come together to unify the sensual offer of creation.a renewal of self transformed from a shattered self you are incredibly talented, and as dark as Poe.but you know that.
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 8 months ago

hello

I thank for putting my name and poes in the same sentence that is way too high of a compliment for this lowly poetess but I like how u put me into a sentence of intense thought which may be why I have extremely painful headaches but then again it also could have to do with my double 's' spine. thank you -diatom shells