BECAUSE

I've journeyed to my place
of pleasure and distaste
been away back today
learned to live along the
way.

Could you arrive without
wanting content with it all
achieve without notice and
to you it wont matter at all,

Cant bleed without hurting
not bitter at all

Cant hope without wanting
I can answer that call .

— ziggy, Sep 14, 2009

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Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

hello Edd

The journey of life takes us many places and teaches us many lessons if only we are open to the experience. This poem employs some sadness, a pinch of joy and is sprinkled with hope. Nicely done. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

hi cat

enda, patrick collins. your right on the money as always , what a nice way of explaining i could do with borrowing your head for a while to finish another , lol many thanks EDD

themoonman

16 years 8 months ago

Ziggy...

I liked this, very powerful piece... I felt the rhyme sort of took some of the power... I want to offer you a different way to write the second stanza, hope you don't mind. Could you arrive without the want for content (instead of wanting) achieve... without notice to you it won't matter this is how I saw this piece, which I thought to be very powerful, you ended it up very strong too. merely a suggestion on your poem sir, it is good the way it is... enjoyed the read very much. Richard

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

hi richard

enda, patrick collins. yes i see what you mean nicely put i will edit thanks again yours edd ps, i only get called sir when i am in trouble . lol

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Always with the point across, excellent. A little sad maybe, but you have answered that call. Loved it. Love Lyz. XX There is always meaning in your words.

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

because

enda, patrick collins. cheers again lyz wrote this a while ago many thanks for the *****,s always nice to hear from you ..........