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Little hands; cup filled

loving sunlight....your words
.
Cups you pass to thirsty lips
,
Knowing eyes have seen,

That special place of heart

Those dancing spirits of rain

Descend your hair
.
In the forced rage of chaos

And doubt
,
Peace a drift in gentle fingers

Into words,

less tiny then love.

Holding quiet hours of sleep
,
Kiss the closed eye of dawn:
Messenger to the joy of morning,
Your smiled sleepy children,

This mother of words,
Gives birth to love.

...................................................................................................o

— Orphani, Sep 13, 2009

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

:) hello

Such a lovely tribute, and all of it true and deserving. Always, Cat

hugo la rosa

16 years 10 months ago

Orphani...o

Let's turn the page, and accept my comment with my apologies. I see great command of the language in this poem, and with it the tenderness of a great poet. Now, I like to thank you for your editing this poem in a manner that I, with my incipient knowledge of poetry, could understand. If you don't mind, of course, I will add you as a friend, I'll try to read as much of your work as possible, as I know you may also read mine. Sincerely, Hugo

lyz

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Orphani

A lovely worded write for a lovely friend, from a lovely friend. Sweet. Love Lyz. XX

Orphani

16 years 10 months ago

be careful Liz or you’ll

be careful Liz or you'll find yourself in a poem. but then you are a poem. ...o

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Barry , You know how I

Dear Barry , You know how I feel about this poem ... but I would like to thank you I was am touched and honoured its a beautiful write ... I think to inspire in others is a great gift, you always inspire me ... love and higgest bugs and biggest hugs Jayne x x x

Orphani

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Jayne, this poem is not

Dear Jayne, this poem is not a gift to you. it is your gift to us. i hope you will pull it out when times are dark and togeather with your faith remember who you are. with love,barry....o

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

You should be so very proud of this delightful tribute & I know

Wow, this is a truly beautiful poem, every line a tender anointment, how Jayne has reached you is amazing. You should be so very proud of this delightful tribute & I know Jayne would be honoured. It stands as a wonderful write, I am hugely impressed. Cheers Anni~ "Making the decision to have a child is momentous. It is to decide forever to have your heart go walking around outside your body". ~Elizabeth Stone

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Tell you dear one

Appropriate. And you are a loving friend. A grand poet to boot. Love Lyz. XX

Bonitaj

16 years 6 months ago

O!

WHat a lovely dedication, crafted with care and love! Sorry I missed it the first time - but glad to vote you up there along side me for the Evolution stakes! CHeers Bonita

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