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A Preying Hunger Sated

Once upon a time
I had a name,
a faceless woman
of no great fame

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I hunt the night
to shadows bend,
its in the Grey
my searching ends

Scoping the cattle
sorting the weak,
A brightness of aura
Is what I seek

Young and lithe
stalking the ground,
I see my meal
has just been found

Alighting to earth
I straighten my dress,
licking my fingers
does the 'mascara' test

Slinking out
into the light,
trans-morphing beauty
now within his sight

Bewitching his mind
with lustful thoughts,
he's weaving this way
my meals been brought

Leading him to
a quiet nook,
I'm making the way
for moving my rook

Sweating I see
his lust is at peak,
my meals been warmed
blue veins I seek

Slipping my hands
though his hair,
staring through eye's
that show no care

My hungers at peak
thus cannot control,
a face in his neck
wanting this feast whole

Pressing my mouth
in the dew of his skin,
unsheathing teeth
they slowly slide in

Taking him into
another realm,
draining his life
is no hard sell

A rapture of blood
flows in my veins,
drifting me through
the higher plains

Then resting his head
on a waistcoat torn,
I straighten myself
in blood I'm adorned

I Stride away
Electrified by night,
Thinking I'd like
A desert to delight

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My name is death
I'm cursed to prey,
knowing I'll never
see sight of the day

— Seren, Sep 12, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

O

Orphani

16 years 9 months ago

Death as vampire woman: how

Death as vampire woman: how many have felt those fangs? Adept; agile demonstation that Seran rules.............o
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear O

Thanks so much for the read and the comment .. The only thing I rule is made paper lol paper kingdoms ;).. but am glad you liked it ... Kind regards Jayne
W

W.C.Wampler

16 years 9 months ago

...hunger sated...poem

SSSSSSSSS.,This is an alter ego fantasy poem. It makes me think of Anne Rice. The Lestat vampire series of books, which were excellent. I could almost see your scenes in a dark blue lighting, with a mist, a beautiful vampire, a happless victim...and the story goes on...wcw
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Mr Wampler

Long time no see !! ... The Anne Rice books .. I was a mad fan when they first came out ... Queen of the damned etc all of them ... If you can see the setting I have nearly done my job thank you so much for the read and the comment its always nice to know when people enjoy these ... kind regards love Jayne x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 9 months ago

Loved the imagery

Your work has a lovely flow and sway to it but I have a problem with the line wanting this feast whole Each time i reread I get stuck here and the image shatters. I can't put my finger on it ...I feel the words are somehow too long or misfit, sorry I am not more specific. Does anyone else feel this ? My favourite part is Sweating I see his lust is at peak, my meals been warmed blue veins I seek A sense of humour in this as the image of fast food. A great topic and surely bring out the night visitors amongst us.
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Liz

Want to know something? I stumbled on that line a little but had planned to see to it when I did an edit, this one is far from finished I still have to play with it a little bit .. thank you so much for the read and the comment ... Keep your eye out for the edit ;) hopefully I can smooth that line out ... Love and hugs Jayne x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Dinner is served...

The tableau is set, and dessert is on him! All your picture needs, is a little hint of a fang showing in the corner of your lip. Perfect! Seren, you have gotten it exactly right! I love it! Not surprisingly, your vampire was spot on. I got the feel of the dark alley, and the heat of your meal. L & Hugz, Gee. ~ P.S. I think the line: wanting the feast whole was fine. Giving the impression you just wanted to gobble him up!
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Gee

When I put these darker ones on I always think of Cat and you LOL you two love the dark and I always wonder what you will say to these ... again for you support and comment (hug) its always nice to know when these ones work ... I been working my ass off on these darker ones they dont come as easy for me as my other writes .. But I have to say ? LOL I got a little pleasure hunting this guy down :O .. bahahahaha I need a name for my alter ego ... I will think it, for this vamire woman I think for her to really live/walkdead LOL she needs a name other than death ;) lmao love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Seren

I hope Snake wears a scarf, Lol. Yes this is amazing and scary yet full of elegance. loved it but I still may wait for the next one before I place my fave. lol. I would feel I was betraying if I chop and change. This poem has a great story line too, and I think it could have a sequel, maybe?. Surely she does not finish with this one man.Lol. Brilliant. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Lyz

Thanks for the read I am sooooo glad you liked this one , I wasnt sure if I had gotten the story right, still learning and working on this one and its not done yet but ??? I get the biggest smile when people like them , Jade will tell you I love it,I get such a thrill when people enjoy what I make in my head lol pmsl snake might wanna get a scarf after reading this one hes not seen it yet , or ?? ......... I so cannot say what I am thinking lmao love you higgest bugs Jayne x x
M

mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

wondrous

This is a Masterpiece, of brilliance, what lust" a manipulated kill, in a joyous contrast of anticipation, for the next stanza, each one more enticing and evolved than the last, I find myself bowing again in your grand shadow of wit, and pure talent. Mantiscepter
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear John

I am speachless at your wonderful comment .. thank you ... I dont know what to say lol ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
yenti

yenti

16 years 9 months ago

Hi Jayne

Creatures of the night a lovely write, though I prefer a gentle dragon or two. You had me looking in the dictionary and that is good, I had to see what you used the word Scoping for and where it came from as it had not touched my eyes before. It is from the Greek, but must look and see if you can (ing) it, what a lovely word to find. Looking as if through a Microscope, your nasty creature was really being picky in his selection of food, would hate to go to a Cafe with him/her they would spend all night selecting something then ending up with raw Black Pudding LOL. As usual your work has reached out to excelence but we knew you were good enough when you first joined us, You take care of you out there and know that we are here for you when needed, Yours Ian.T PS:- At your level you are now judged on excelence so when you get those 5 stars it will really be Awesome, La La
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Ian

Glad you liked this one its a darker kind of write but its just another experiment lol as are all these are,to see where I can go and if I like what I find at the end of the write I post , I have over 200 unfinished poems .. it has become a love ... thank you soo much for your kind words, and I will work on that last star I am working on one that might go on tonight depending on how much time the kids let me have , My daughter is coming up to exams and we have a routine for her study, I am strict with both the younger two the older two already finished school without too many tears so I try and give the younger two as much of my time as they need ... oh and scoping/scope can have a -ING just thought you might like to know lol love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 8 months ago

oooh I love Vampires Seren,

oooh I love Vampires Seren, So deliciously evil and alluring. Verse 9 and 11 you use peak twice, But that is the only point I would like to point out. GREAT READ, that was really enjoyable and sucked me in to the fantasy of it. Julie D.D.
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Julie

LOL I didn't even notice but I have yet to do a last edit on this one sometimes I edit sometimes I don't depends on the day ... good to see you round hun , will be round reading tonight will have a look see what you have been up to take care thanks for the read and the comment its always good to see you, (hugz) much love and hugz Jayne
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Jayne

As you requested, no stars... you have NO idea how hard that is to do on a piece which deserves them. Your Vampire Lady rules the night. And in rhyme! This is something that I can greatly appreciate. I best loved the opening and closing stanzas. Breathtaking! Your, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Cat

I knew you would love her, I do already shes taken up residence in my mind and wants me to write more and with her having a name 'Ivy Rose' has given her more substance ,and I think I might have to write a few more of these , I thoughtly enjoyed writing them , and dont worry about them stars my darlin friend , those yellow spots might be gone but even if you dont give them to me your words are better than any stars ((((HUGZ)))) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x