Seren

Sep 10, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Changeling

Once upon
a dreary vale,
a ghostly image
floating pale

Set my hair
to stand on end,
a living nightmare
did begin

Through the tree
she passed with ease,
floating gently
as a breeze

White her hands
were pearly hue,
nails were red
and veins ran blue

Auburn hair
that glittered fire,
dressed in webs
that spoke desire

Sweeping hand
across my lips,
writhing wildly
image shifts

In Changeling form
she was renewed,
shining with
a golden hue

Cold as ice,
that grace the poles,
wrapping around
my spirit folds

A tongue of fire
ripped my soul,
in changeling form
I now enfold

— Seren, Sep 10, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Jayne

This one is chilling! The thought of being taken over by a spirit, with a changeling left behind, is a true horror. I LOVE IT! Tell me, do you celebrate Halloween in Australia? It is one of my favorite holidays and this write is perfect for the holiday. You have such a fertile mind! Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Cat,

my Dads birthday is on Halloween and I ahve always had a special afinity to the mysterious as you know and I wrote this one thinking maybe you might like it LOL ... ((HUGZ)) I always get such a thrill when you like them sometimes I think I write just for you, but I love doing it :) much love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

im glad i picked this one i think its great the idea of changelings though scares the hell outta me ill have to look out next time im round you know whos place eggshellant work jay knee 2 bums\ <3♣

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Matty :P

Thanks for the help I might work on that other one I like it but it needs spicing up a little :P and I knew you would steer me right thanks darlin love and higgest bugs Jay-knee 2bums LOL:P mwah

greeneyes

16 years 9 months ago

Fucking amazing

Excuse my French, I do not normally curse, but this was with out a shadow of a doubt, the best fucking poem I read in a long time. I am in total awe. Love, Greeneyes

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Biggest Smiles ...

I love a woman that can speak her mind lol I do sometimes he he :P thanks for the read hun I am so glad you liked it will be round reading, later on today and see what new treasure you have for me ... take care hope you and the kids are well .. love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

Change

wonderful as always ,very catchy, it just trips off your tongue in a rhythmic fantasy, chilling and thrilling [BAD TO THE BONE] Awesome girl. you go. John. Mantiscepter

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear John

Thank you so much , I always get such a thrill when you like them I am getting to be a fan of yours love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Jayne

You scary girl. Love the Title, write and bloody great read. The Changeling, how creepy, Lol.Well done. Loved it. Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Lyz

Thanks so much for the read and I am so happy you liked it, was one I had been working on for a bit and then decided last night I am done ... thanks hun I always look for your comments now LOL and I love it when you enjoy them ... Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x Give Jade a kiss for me I am starting to miss her again now shes home lol (hug)

hugo la rosa

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Jayne

Your poem rivals with those of Allan Poe, chilling and at the same time engaging. I wonder when you will publish "The Best of Seren." I'm not kidding. You are good! Regards, Hugo

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Hugo

I sat here for five minutes trying to think what to say to you lol ... Thank you to start with, Poe is one of my all time favourites I sit here with a volume of his above my head,I have now been compared to Poe and Keats and that alone is honour enough for me :) I die a happy woman LOL but I am honoured you think they are good, for you write beautifully, coming from you that means the world to me ... Love and biggest hugs of thanks Jayne x x

Electric Blue

16 years 8 months ago

Changling

Jayne Wow what a tantilizing fantasy eerie it is thrilling chilling to the bone Just Awesome. Where do you get the idea to write a master piece as this tell me I love how it flows it rhyms the images the colours so dark and light of day and night. Wow and double Wow How do you do this tell me so that i can try to create such stories on the subject like this. I love the new picture it is well suited to this amazing poem. I know i have seen this picture before what is it and the story behind it. This came to life in full for me like a movie it unfolded slowly shadows soft shadows dark i am there it was me did you not see Electric Blue .

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Magz,

(hug) good to see you darlin ... that picture I found on the net years ago I know its a private artist but thats all , shes good there are hundreds of pictures like this one round the net so I am sure you probably have seen some of her art, How do I write these ? now there is a question I have a set routine for writing... its like I meditate till I find a centre and then ? the story comes ... I cant really explain it Maggie I am not sure how i am doing it myself as i said to someone the other day its nearly like automatic writing when I write these ones , they just flow ...I am so glad you liked this one love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x