Making Rainbows

And your touch on this one is light and soft but always beautiful Beki .. Love and hugz Jayne x x

the debris has settled in my life as if nothing had happened I wont even question but believe and this little poem is so serene and untroubled in its passion and true poetry rings This is an amazing and beautiful poem Beki Thank You

enda, patrick collins. "your standing on the rainbows end have watched the rays of light desend" hi i love the theme ,lovely

which is the greater miracle: the rainbow ,or the EyE, or the mind that questions it all. thus poetry. a captivation of color, partly intrinsic.....o

Delicious lovely Beki, you are so gorgeous in that pic too... I see your wings only somehow I know the REAL ones are fare more impressive.. but I digress (just read the new community guidelines, I think it means I should keep more personal observations to myself or private, probably fare enough, be interested on your thoughts on this?). So I found this write delightful & I agree with Jaynes comment re the light touch, it's true, there is a gentle tumbling unfolding sensation you've managed to convey with your words... If I HAD to crit this it would just be that the last section is just the tiniest bit less smooth than the rest (I still completely adore it as is!)... so here are my thoughts seeing as the guidelines call it from us... (I realise I just do hate to meddle in the writing of others unless there is a glaring issue) Come drench me Refract me Make an arc of me Split me into hazy colours Call me Iris let me kiss (if you added another syllable here to balance the 3rd line... maybe let me soft kiss... or, let me cloud kiss (I WOULD say that, but it would fit so beautifully) it would run more fluidly in my mind with the rhythm of these 2 sets of 4 lines... might be just me though) the rooftops then gently fade Love you to pieces Beki, I hate the thought of not being able to comment on your writing so I am making extra effort to tow the guideline suggestions, hope that's ok. PS I want to see this in spotlight, I feel it deserves that! So have my nom with love & admiration, I can still discriminate between what I believe are good writes despite having a connection with you... I connect with many good writers, I'd be leaving no comments if I ceased to comment on those I felt connected with. I'm sure this is fine. Cheers Anni~ "Making the decision to have a child is momentous. It is to decide forever to have your heart go walking around outside your body". ~Elizabeth Stone