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The Glorious Pill


 Black tides have fallen
to shores barren of

the hopes of existence
spirits once we did love

faeryless dreams wandering hills
of minds since taken

by this glorious pill
lost were  senses

once we shared
but gone before taking

this trip  one dares
like a box filled with dark

the mind holds in all
letting nothing escape it

oppressing the calls
of souls not ready

to give into death
still searching for hope

a normal life's breath






























— mantiscepter, Sep 09, 2009

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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Mantiscepter

Sad, beautiful and a lonely poem. Spell check: Barren? of the hopes of existence. I hate the thought of losing it but hopefully, someone will remember for me. I love the way you put the emotion into your work. It comes through with the many aspects of your delicious writes. Lyz xx
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

Hi Lyz right spelling, wrong

Hi Lyz right spelling, wrong word to use. I had other thoughts, that left with my morning coffee. so forgive me, and thank you. I loved your comments, really happy you liked it. will write soon. Mantiscepter
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear John, I love these

Dear John, I love these moments of yours that you share with us, poignant and sad ... and they come to life in your words Love and hugz Jayne x x
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

Glorious

Hello there seren,I see you have been very prolific lately, boy you sure have the gift for these lovely talented writings, I've read this week, woo hoo.!! thank you for your words of direction, and support. Much Love. John. Mantiscepter
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 9 months ago

Haunting

The words in this poem are haunting. It is beautifully written and it flows so well. it is now one of my favorites on Neopoet. Always, Greeneyes
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

Black Tides

Again I thank you for being so wonderfully kind, with your words offered so eloquently, I just came from reading your new. [ all hallows 'eve ] WOW>>> thankx again. Much love. John. Mantiscepter