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The X-Factor

As the smoke wafted it's way up towards the ceiling
only to greet the ceiling fan to meet it's demise,
I had seen no hard evidence
the day had started, with my own eyes.

What if I were asleep and dreaming?
Then I would own this moment, all alone still;
but, if that were not I'd have to share it
with my brother "Time", who can alter my will.

Right now, I'm in the proverbial "pause" mode
where I'm allowed to drift in a limbowed vaccuum,
and the tiniest fraction of a millisecond lasts an hour
which is disheartening, when hoping that time'll resume.

I fixate on the day ahead of me
and focus my attention to the planned day,
How well had I done, and could I make a difference?
No, there's an X-Factor involved with the outcome, anyway.

My mind has no time on it's mind
so I flash back to yesterday, at night,
when I didn't "FWD" that lucky email
and that thought decidedly stirred up a fright !

I scream because the second hand is frozen on the clock !
and awaken from my slumber a refreshed man;
and chuckle with myself at the prospect of an X-Factor
as my cigar smoke wafts it's way towards the ceiling fan. 
— docmaverick, Sep 09, 2009

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Orphani

16 years 9 months ago

x-facter

i was really sucked in to this work at: "greet the ceiling fan to meet it's demise". great potential here--tho i felt the ending needed more weight to balance.solid theme set mood beautifuly set.i bow.........o
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 9 months ago

Actually....

...I was somewhat "stumped" for ANY type of ending for this one !{L.o.l.} I'm afraid my imagination might've dismissed itself without my knowing. I see what you mean, though. Too much "set-up". Thanks for the critique. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Oh Doc I wouldnt say its

Oh Doc I wouldnt say its about nothing , wanting to stay in the dream so that reality doesn't suck you in and drifting there for a bit there, hey its called reflections in some reads lol depends which way you want to view it ... great write as per though mr maverick lol love and hugz Jayne x x btw had a mad Jam last night lol ;)
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 9 months ago

Thanks, Jayne....

...for the vote of confidence. I kinda took it on the chin, with that last critique.....but, I can kinda see the point. It could've been better. I am glad that you had a nice "session"...as did I, this Labor Day week-end ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.