Seren

Sep 05, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dream in the Wind

I dreamed the wind
could talk to the sea
he whispered quietly,

"Lets travel a mile
our ease set free"

Trembling in awe
of the windy king,
she rode the eddy's
to what would it bring?

Not a word
passed his lips,
not a sound
but silence fits

They traveled together
wind in hand,
washing and blowing
across the sands

Eventually,
his gust blew out,
weary he rested
and looked about

Blowing so soft
he rippled a wave,
sensuous foaming
a tide is made

Thinking that silence
would be lifelong,
the sea went out
moon rides begun

I'm now a sentinel
for the four winds,
watching the moon
as the sea rescinds

— Seren, Sep 05, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

wickedly amazing.....you wrote there here?! wish some of your talent stuck behind.... ill have to sit on that lounge where u pissed urself and find out :p haha awesome write ms 2 bums ♣

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Yup that was writen at your house lol ... and remember it was windy and I kept saying how much I loved the wind well , one night you left the window open lmao and I dreamed wind lmao ;) right after I pissed on your lounge :D ;) love you mwah Jayne x x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves". Lynn Hall ...

Barbara Writes

16 years 9 months ago

Jayne

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Barbara

*Smile* thank you sooo much I am so glad you like this one its a favourite of mine , love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Jayne

I believe you have out done yourself with this piece. I love the idea of the sea and the wind being personified and friends. Can't pick any favorites as they all hit home for me. Always, Cat

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Cat

Thanks so much for the read hun , I wrote this one at Matty's last week I am so glad you liked it, with love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

hugo la rosa

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Serene

The symbol of the wind personifies for me whatever changes we have to make in life, it always moves, restless; and the sea represents the female sensuality of the earth, which sets its moods by the moonlight. Your poem talks of freedom after a storm... Good write! Hugo

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Cool

Very cool, enjoyed this one very much. Should come to Newy more often. It has a romantic tone about it. I love all you have described in this here beautiful story. Every line of it. Love Lyz. x

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Lyz,

You just scared me LOL I was answering Hugo and then saw your message thought mine hadnt posted lmao ... ok I am a slightly mental this morning it was a long night ... I always write prolificly at Matty's I rough drafted 15 poems In 5 days ..and this is a love story of the elements I guess , I loved writing this one though it wasn't easy , I wrote it about 6 times before i was happy lol much love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

By the way,

Love the new pics and congrats on spotlight. Love Lyz. x

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Thank Lyz !!(hug)

Thats my little Mate 'Chaos' LOL and hes a pushy little devil hes sitting on my lap in front of the computer in that picture where he usually sits LOL I wanted to show Cat(Candlewitch) I am always talking bout the animals I am going to put pics up over the next few weeks ... Thanks for the congrates hun ((((((((hugz))))))) big love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Hugo,

I am honoured , you read into it? what in essense was the meaning ... my goodness I couldnt have said it better , thank you so much for the read and the stars , your words are a gift on my page and I always look forward to seeing them ... never more so than today ...much love and hugz Jayne "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

windy

Well Jayne, this was very beautiful,and was a nice little story, that I was so happy I got to read. Your a rare jewell, Mantiscepter

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear John

Btw I love your new pic :) and I am always happy when you like them my friend , your a gem in my eyes I have been reading you since the first day and you just get better and better , Ive enjoyed watching it ;) much love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 9 months ago

Another

awesomely amazing piece, how do you do it!! love ya to bits :)fleur

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Fleur my love I do it with

Fleur my love I do it with the inspriation of friends like you , making me want to write that one GREAT poem lol one day I shall :) love you heaps huni mwah Jayne (((hug))) "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Dream in the wind...

I love the ease with which you write about the forces of nature. I think you must have been a sprite in a previous life! LOL I loved the lines: "Blowing so soft he rippled a wave, sensuous foaming a tide is made." L & Hugz, Gee.

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Gee,

I am in the mood to ramble LOL so I shall not something I do often but eh ? :) I got time ... when I was little I was on my own ALOT parents working grandparents minding me but one with a farm the other the ambulance chief of the mid north coast so you can imagine I was left to my own devices a fair bit, though under scrutiny lol ... I found animal friends and wandering on the farm grew to love nature I was the girl milking the cows at 5am standing in cowdung in my gumboots to keep my feet warm :) yup I did that lmao ... I was also the one riding horses in the middle of storms to everyones great dismay ... and the one to go canoeing in floodwaters I was mental but I loved the forces of nature ... still do .. I used to live near a little town on the north coast called Lennox Head whenever it stormed I used to go up to the headlands and just stand in the wind lol ... it was good fun invigorating I think would be the word ... now you see where it all comes from there was a method to my madness in rambling ;) lol take care huni much love Jayne x x And please wish your lovely wife a happy birthday for me will you hope you both enjoy her special day ((((hugz))))) "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

orgami

16 years 9 months ago

restorative tension camber

new nights tease to unknown days the mantle of the forest dying bright with wicked flame the torch of luminesce orange and yellow like new horizons glowing in the ponder of the dark this poem is rivetting in its quest I sit at the waters edge on my bench awaiting answers viewing the scene in quiet awe arm slung up on bench trying so hard to look at ease (while inside I seeth with crashing breakers and ferocious amplified winds) losing material things and gaining some kind of new beginning the old still upon the setting though for how long I cannot tell nor predict I am happy and terrified and excited feeling all this and reading this calming thoughtful poem how wonderful the dexterity of width in all of that excellent poem Seren thank you

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Steven

I am glad you found a calm within your storm, as when I write these I calm myself, if there is such a thing as meditation in word I sometimes find it glad you could find a centre in your storm ... thanks you for the read I always enjoy seeing you visit my poems ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

believe

16 years 9 months ago

Love this type of poem!!

I love this sort of rhyme, and a great theme idea too! Great stuff well done! Ray

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Ray,

Thank you so much for the read and the comment I will be out and about tonight, will have a look and see what you have been up to, have spent the afternoon in hospital LOL so it was nice to come home and find these lovely compliments :) love and hugz Jayne x x

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

We are lulled into the silence

And here you are in the bazing sun oon the beach of Neopoets basking in the light we warm blooded creatures cast upon you! And I haven't appeared in the run up. The thought is beautiful, quite beautiful. We are lulled into the silence, and yet in that silence is the roar of the birth of both the elements in our subconcious minds quietly throbbing in the background of your poem. I like it, especially the idea of it, and would like you to write several more on the same theme, exhaust its lovely idea more Jayne, I think you would find more than a gem on the beach of your mind, a poem that would be even more wonderful. Ann in the north with love. NOW I have read the other comments and feel slightly out of place I don't wish to dampen the fire of your creation, but I was being brutaly honest with my feelings about it. 'scuse I, Ann XXXOOO could the sea just ...rescinds intead of does?

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Ann

HUG and a big smile I think thats one of the best compliments, thank you so much, made my night :), there are more of these type of poems ,they just arent completed yet, this one took a month of editing and walking away and then editing and walking away again,till I said ok thats as close as I am going to get it ... I love nature and had always wanted to write my wind and sea together I love both so much ... and I thank you because you got what I aimed for, the silence in the sound, of the both of them is quite beautiful, if you let yourself listen, for a long time I looked inside myself now I look out and around for my inspiration , and serendipity has been good to me of late ... And I will have a look at rescind and remove the does I think you are right, thank you for taking a look at this one much love and big hugz Jayne x x x

chumfin

16 years 9 months ago

this piece is really

this piece is really amazing, your sure have away with words. please more of such creative write. chumfin

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Chumfin

thank you so much for your comment I am happy you enjoyed it :) kind regards Jayne :)

Electric Blue

16 years 9 months ago

Dream in the Wind

Jayne The wind does talk to the sea with gentle caress whispers be Haunting Silence in stolen hours shared with me This is the place I will always be beautiful my friend I am there Electric Blue

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Magz

This is not so bad a place to be my friend HUG I am so glad you found some peace in this one ... the wind .... it bewitches me what can I say ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

my hero

How the hell i missed this one, I dont know. You are a magicain Jayne, and i am forever you fan. Love, Elizabeth

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

this ones from a while back and its one of my favourite rhymers lol cause its got my two favourite things in it wind and the sea ... thanks for your comment you could make a girl blush lol ... one day ? these will be forgotten except for maybe my family but its always nice knowing that you guys may remember the odd one or two ... love and hugs Jayne x x

aeron

16 years 7 months ago

If you are my guide

does that mean I have to like your poetry? Beautiful words, beautifully written, but trite romantic content, sorry, Aeron

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Aeron

Nope it doesnt mean you have to like my poetry lol but there is a place for everything ... peoples tastes vary .. what one will like another will detest ... I find it tends to be an age thing,poetry I didnt appreciate as a young woman ... I now find beautifully touching,we journey and we all learn at different levels ...and I am never offended when people dont like my poetry .. theres a whole lot out there ... I dont relate to ... but that again comes down to taste and personal views .. I wrote a lot of rhyme in the middle of my chemo this was one of them its not an excuse its just that was all I was up to writing .. it gave me something to do and a passion to pursue ... you will find seriously serious writers here to those who write for a hobby ... we all have our place and we all help each other grow as writers ... you are certainly in the right place if you want to be in a workshop environment ... I have grown more than I could have possibley imagined ... we all have our place in the scheme of things and what you dont like ... just pass it by ...or offer critique to improve it ... never attack the person or the personal opinions or views, its expressly forbidden in the community guidelines ... this is a workshop we are here to improve poetry not discourage people from writing because we dont agree with the way someone says or sees things ... again ... its all about taste and personality ... not everyone is going connect in word You know a lot of the famous poets in the romantic era where shunned and not liked for the way they wrote and what they wrote... love and hugs Jayne x x

aeron

16 years 7 months ago

you are good!

I know I can learn from you Aeron

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

I am not even a scratch on

I am not even a scratch on good yet ... but I am a sponge and I take everything in lol ... one day I want to write a poem, a fucking awesome poem ... but till then I will hone my craft ... and learn from some of the best and you got it all here at your fingertips you just have to extend that hand ;) love and hugs Jayne x x

hippiepoet69

16 years 4 months ago

I Enjoyed it

The sea and the wind are friends. And together they are a force to be recken with. Thanks Electric Blue