Barbara Writes

Sep 04, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Autumn

Autumn

Autumn leaves
Along the wayside
A lonely sunset

Hunter moon blush
Orange fire burned
In the eastern skies

Birds sang farewells
Evening skies
Flying south

Love of two hearts
Appalachian mountain
The rising sun

— Barbara Writes, Sep 04, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Oh Barbara

You are surprising me each time. Lovely touch of romance I see. Well done, I enjoyed. Lyz.

Barbara Writes

16 years 9 months ago

Lyz

Glad you like it. I thought the touch of romance at the end would give it a special touch. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Barbara ,

I loved this one its beautiful I only had one problem and it was with these lines The hunter moon glowed --- this line ? the hunter moon glowed ... dont ask me why I stumbled and it could be just me but the hunter's moon or a hunters moon ... its just an opinion but I really loved this poem :) Of orange fire Burned in the eastern skies Beautiful work again from your pen .. love and hugz Jayne-Chloe x x x ...Quote:-"We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves". Lynn Hall ...

Barbara Writes

16 years 9 months ago

Jayne

I was thinking the same. It should be hunter's moon. Thanks for he suggestion. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Barbara

I am still newish at this critiqing business LOL but have started to have some courage and make suggestions ... sooo glad you liked mine its usually when I really like something that I make them ... much love and respect Jayne x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

Barbara Writes

16 years 9 months ago

Seren

You are doing great. I was terrible at giving suggestions and just as bad at understanding the suggestions I did get. I kept trying anyway. Commenting at first then working up to suggestions is the way to go. It's what I did and it worked with help from my friends here. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

Mountain magic moments

Oh beautiful, just beautiful Barbara, you singe our thoughts with colours and the fires of passion in a sensitive and charming manner, here in this little gem of a poem. You have in this, like the skies of Africa, sunsets and sunrises, those irresistable moments of fire that make even the natives of that country stand, silently in awe of its grandeur, as they did when my Aunt was visiting Nairobi, there was a sudden hush, and all people with that big expanse of the view, stood still to watch the rising of the sun. She was very moved by the act. You make us stand still as we read your poem dear Barbara, yes you do! Love Ann of Norway

Barbara Writes

16 years 9 months ago

Ann

Glad you like it and thanks for the beautiful comment. I have never been to Africa or seen its beautiful images you describe here. Glad you share them. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

Neither have I been to Africa

But your poem sent me straight there with this memory of a description from my Aunt Anne who wrote it in a wonderful letter to me many years ago. She was a botanist so taken with the beautiful things in nature. Love Ann

greeneyes

16 years 9 months ago

beautiful

Visually stunning this was! I loved it. Greeneyes

Barbara Writes

16 years 8 months ago

Greeneyes

Thanks for the comment, it is much appreciated ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

deelilah

16 years 8 months ago

You captured me

totally at the end with: 'Two hearts fell in love On the Appalachian mountain At the rising of the sun' Having driven across these many times, I received an instant happy visual. And now is the time of the year to see the Appalachians. Hope to revisit the scene soon. Deelilah

Barbara Writes

16 years 8 months ago

Deelilah

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 8 months ago

nicly and vividly pictured.

nicly and vividly pictured. shan

Barbara Writes

16 years 8 months ago

R.M

Sambpoet

16 years 8 months ago

Not a word out of place! I

Not a word out of place! I like the way you use the anaspestic measure of u u ' to make your poem run smoothly. I like this poem! Sal

Barbara Writes

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks

Glad you like, appreciate you comment much ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Sambpoet

16 years 7 months ago

Being one who takes the

Being one who takes the poetry-writing craft seriously, I appreciate others like you who do also and their work is always impressive to me.

Sambpoet

16 years 6 months ago

Barbara, for one thing, in

Barbara, for one thing, in your "Autumn Leaves" poem, I'd change the tense to the present. Also, it seems to me, the poem should have a title that encompasses all the imagery, not just autumn leaves. It seems the poem consists of several haiku and is not free form.

Barbara Writes

16 years 6 months ago

Sampoet

thanks for critiquing each stanza do stand on its own, but is not haiku at least in the traditional sense,5-7-5 which is how I write haiku. but you are right about the title. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara