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Sep 04, 2009
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Beyond the White Line
There she stands
On the edge of the platform,
Hesitantly, unsteady
readily about to fall.
I envision her landing
awkwardly onto the tracks
her back snapping
cracking and her legs relaxing
I see her embracing deaths kiss
sinking, existing in the abyss
right now though
I just cant handle this
its making me nervous,
I want to scurry up to her
and drag her to shelter
but i just sit here
scowling, beginning to swelter
I feel a rush of cool air
and hear an impending rumble
I'm still watching intently,
intensely hoping she won't tumble
She leaps to attention
taking two or three steps back
from her edged location
before the steel juggernaut
burns through the station
I exhale, wiping the sweat from my face
in my mind
I saw horrid things take place
like messy amputations
and jagged decapitations.
yet Im still pleased
that i have my vivid imagination.
On the edge of the platform,
Hesitantly, unsteady
readily about to fall.
I envision her landing
awkwardly onto the tracks
her back snapping
cracking and her legs relaxing
I see her embracing deaths kiss
sinking, existing in the abyss
right now though
I just cant handle this
its making me nervous,
I want to scurry up to her
and drag her to shelter
but i just sit here
scowling, beginning to swelter
I feel a rush of cool air
and hear an impending rumble
I'm still watching intently,
intensely hoping she won't tumble
She leaps to attention
taking two or three steps back
from her edged location
before the steel juggernaut
burns through the station
I exhale, wiping the sweat from my face
in my mind
I saw horrid things take place
like messy amputations
and jagged decapitations.
yet Im still pleased
that i have my vivid imagination.
— Bosscombat, Sep 04, 2009
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lyz
16 years 9 months ago
Hi
Bosscombat
16 years 9 months ago
:)
Fleur MacDonald
16 years 9 months ago
Oh bloody hell
Bosscombat
16 years 9 months ago
:)
Kailashana
16 years 9 months ago
You have such a potty brain,
Bosscombat
16 years 9 months ago
:)
Seren
16 years 9 months ago
Dearest Matty
Bosscombat
16 years 9 months ago
:)
Geezer
16 years 9 months ago
Think you been...
Bosscombat
16 years 9 months ago
:)