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Beyond the White Line

There she stands
On the edge of the platform,
Hesitantly, unsteady
readily about to fall.
I envision her landing
awkwardly onto the tracks
her back snapping
cracking and her legs relaxing
I see her embracing deaths kiss
sinking, existing in the abyss
right now though
I just cant handle this
its making me nervous,
I want to scurry up to her
and drag her to shelter
but i just sit here
scowling, beginning to swelter
I feel a rush of cool air
and hear an impending rumble
I'm still watching intently,
intensely hoping she won't tumble
She leaps to attention
taking two or three steps back
from her edged location
before the steel juggernaut
burns through the station
I exhale, wiping the sweat from my face
in my mind
I saw horrid things take place
like messy amputations
and jagged decapitations.
yet Im still pleased
that i have my vivid imagination.

— Bosscombat, Sep 04, 2009

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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Hi

One last read and your it. Sorry, what a horrible imagination. Ha! Great write. Bit morbid and sick, but u keep us coming back for more. And tru to say, I am glad it is your imagination. Lol. Nah, ur a clever lad, yea lad, and ur imagination keeps u on ur toes, how is that book coming? along I hope. Enjoyed the read, smile and a look into the future of an upcoming author. Lyz.
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

Lyz you're always prompt with your flattery haha Yeh the book is comin along slowly. I write like a drunken snail travels Thanks a lot for your comments :) ♣
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 9 months ago

Oh bloody hell

you took me to the edge of a wild ride, well done, Brilliant!!!! :)Fleur This site is better than TV!!!
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

heya fleur glad u like it! this site...better than tv.... how can u suggest this site is better than the likes of today tonight or the constant barrage of reality hell?! sometimes shit on a stick is better than tv :P i wish upon shooting stars for quality programming thank you for your comment and vote :) appreciate it ♣
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

potty mouth potty brain lucky im even potty trained ooo that rhymed and i didnt even mean it to thank you, your always too kind ♣
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Matty

OooOOoOooOooo darlin' sorry I am late to your party LOL and in my Jammies!! wish me happy birthday bitch lmao ... great write its again one of your best but then I knew you could do it I been telling you for how long ??? lmao love being right once in a while you know ;) love and biggest hugs Jayknee 2 bums ;) mwah "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

yeh ur late to my party :P always with the flattery jknee 2bums happy birthday btw :p hope ur havin a blast up at home :) <3 ♣
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Think you been...

Think you been picking my brain, I do the very same thing on occaision, I imagine what might happen, if.... I wonder if it is like minds, and all that stuff. LOL I loved it! I thought for sure that she took those two or three steps back to get a running start! I was ready for all that decapitation, amputation, etc. Ya got five from me! More gore! Gee.
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

heya gee i was thinking of killing off the girly i too dont mind a little bit o gore but i thought nah ill let her live a little while longer might write a part 2 where she meets her demise lol ill make it extra gorey for you lol glad u liked it mate :) ♣