the lady is a forest

she definitely is all of us sounds like something I would do only growing moon flowers that's a beautiful scene! thanks for this. my fave part is, She weeps and ink flows down her cheeks Like she is a paper doll come undone, its enchanting and at the same time very sad. lots of love! -diatom shells

What can I say cardboard kingdoms and ink tears, this is beautiful, you always write and put pictures in my mind and this one caught it and ran away I think I may have read this like 5 times .. Loved it its an awesome write :D one of the best I have read lately ... Respect and Kind Regards Jayne We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

Diplomat Poet/Godess her poem range sweeping from pawing unicorn to hardcore revelation of pain seeping through aged eyes beautiful and hopefilled I sit back musing reading Emarie this is a beautiful poem full of wonderful darkness and corners of disturbing discovery like the haunted funhouse or more the mansion to wander with graffitti where the lost go to seek shelter and comfort these latest poems are amazing wish I could say more but I'll end with the above My Pawprint Proudness!!!!

This was a beautiful read. I am in awe. It is true, you paint what u write, absolutely , this is great. Lyz

Lovely Emarie, you have real style woman & glorious oomph beneath sweet subtlety. This is beautifully blended & warmly placed. A lovely treat to read. Cheers Anni~ "A word is not the same with one writer as with another. One tears it from his guts. The other pulls it out of his overcoat pocket". ~Charles Peguy

she must be all of us, feels like my paper and ink twin. Loved the moonflowers and the "paper doll come undone". Yours, ~Nina

The End of course being the moody season the fall season the clean sky and lonely streets emptied of summer traffic where I can breathe where my spirit can play behind me far far away I read these words and my memories of Atwoods books and now Sextons letters sharp and rounded clear and lucid dipped in their bright moment with meaning I read this poem again with so much clarity it jumps out vivid extolerable sensitivity "cardboard kingdom" my favourite line the whole poem digs deep in the quiet shelter of Now again I thank you

E Marie How and when did you enter into my realm of the moonlit forest as I kneel holding onto the blooms. I cherish their light that fills my heart. My tears ink dark blue fall sadly as daylight appears Wonderful my dear friend. You are welcome in my forest anytime. Amazing I was there, I am there. You were watching me Always Electric Blue

is a treacherous thing but I have to say you have succeeded in this instance. Firstly, I love the title and the subtitle twist on the standard cliche is perfect. Secondly, there are clean images and a solid progression of story from one stanza to the next. Now, in this piece you are using some punctuation and I am of the mind that it should either be all or nothing in the punctuation department. With this in mind I am going to offer punctuation suggestions. Lastly, I like the last line but the length of it stumbles for me. As you've chosen free form as your structure I want you to embrace line 4 and have 5 lines in the 3rd stanza for a couple of reasons. The first is that it will make it flow better and the second is that it will act as a repetition of line 4 in action form. Basically you state the circumstance, then you implement it. It lends a connection between the poem and the presentation in a subtle manner. Let me show you what I mean. --------------------------- The lady is a forest *and we can’t see her for the trees* She wears amber on black, Like they are complimenting colors, And we all stand and stare in awe She is a rule bender, the exception. She only grows moon flowers in her garden Like they are more than just a rare weed And we all gather on that night As she kneels, her hands cupping the bloom. She weeps and ink flows down her cheeks Like she is a paper doll come undone And we help her strike the match As she tears at the walls of her cardboard kingdom. ----------------------------------------------- Minor changes all. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

This is the poem that I created a poem from Last line is still great but I read this again and found still more so much meaning to me all myths from childhood till now experience in the percieved "princess's" in my day Ukraine folk tales of wolves Russia folklore of which I love the pop singers its like poetry I dont understand the complete of it like some taught trained disciplined but I know what I Love the flow of it like hearing it read over and over I just know what I like and I like this poem for its clever word use its sad feel it has a potency and dark tenderness this old wolf loves

Emaire This is enchanting haungtinly dark seductive evan so beautiful but you saw me kneeling in the moonlight with cupped hands and ink tears falling. always Blue

So good to read this one again .. I enjoyed it months ago and even more tonight ... congrates on evolution ... love and hugs Jayne Happy new years lol nearly here only two hours left !!

Just read your words. To me, it seemed to deepen after the first stanza, almost as if we were becoming part of the poem. Really nice read! Chris