Color me held

This is beautiful, poignant,and wonderful write my friend, colour my world in crayons , select my voice for me .... ahhh dont we just wish we could do that ... Love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Well I had just logged back in and in my friends list it was first off the rank ... and those first lines caught me and held me , its a beautiful write I know your not into mushy stuff but I love seeing this side of you , another facet to YOU .. its a awesome write I found it so easy to read ... :) love and hugz Jayne x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

I enjoyed your words very much and being held at night is just as enjoying. Lyz.

Ahhh...my moonman, this is the poem I would want my Lover to write for me. ~A

I am surrounded by mediate seclusion life has swarmed me I have no choice but to settle in this new family immediate wants needs I am bending through choice accomadating this and that forgoing luxuries Poetry is just my wish list of extravangance yet I would wish for it no other way busy and here I am morning chores in the thick with more to come happy to read your realistic poem there is an English Punk band all girl called Fluffy who sang a song at CBGB's "Wanna be your lush" its around here somewhere that cd I never thought I would find another version until I read your poem here Amazingly cool thanks

Loved these lines, because the resonate in me: Paint my numbers freely bitch… if that’s your need do me how you want to but hold me while I sleep just hold me while I sleep the last two lines brought tears to my eyes. Always, Cat

Congrates on spotlight I pushed that thar button and so did snake we both loved this write :) Love and hugz Jayne :) "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Richard, just loved this! I think if you left off "it" on line 8 it would be just a tad better.[my personal preference]Nomination from me~ _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Quite masterful. Feels like that reservation of strength, a choice in some sacrifice and noting its worth. Yet another great write. Nathaniel

Not your style? I knew there was this side to you, you just keep it well hidden. Like my wife, who is known as the tough one of us. I'd tell you my secret name for her, but if she finds out..... Let's just say, I tell her that her heart is one of cotten candy, she melts for me. I like that you can admit to having a softer side," Paint my numbers freely. Bitch, if that's your need."] Nice ! Gee.

THe poem that is! Nice intimate display of "neediness" without desperation! Hard to do Richard! CHeers Bonita

Loved this, Richard... A beautiful and sincere write. my favorite lines were "Plant your garden around me to your love I am committed fluff me, prod me, make me grow display me so the world can see it" Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

Have to agree with jayne on this ...would love to have someone write this for me too ...no wonder it got the thumbs up from your wife...lovely sentiment 'being held while I sleep'.

Very powerful sentiment,needy and sensual, open,and honest Loved it. Mantiscepter

Pick me up off the canvas! This is a knock out. I felt the final blow with your title, which fortunately for me was noted after the incredible read. The Title itself, 'Color me held', is utterly perfect and is a poem in itself. You are so colorfully but brutally blunt in your selection of words to convey your sense of 'needy' and your willful imprisonment by one, whose soul purpose is to transform you to their liking. Coincidentally, just this morning I was wondering if anyone can as effectively end a poem with the same line repeated such as with, 'miles to go before I sleep and miles to go before I sleep'. Two thumbs AND two hallucies up to ya. You pulled it off. This is the finest I've read of yours to date. Nicely done PINT :)

I enjoy reading this then one word stop me I skipped it lol, and continue to read this masterpiece, beautifully written. I see why your wife loved it it is a beautiful love poem. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

I have I told you lately how much I love reading your poetry Richard. I always find inspirations, even in your use of Bitch and what it MIGHT mean to you. "display me so the world can see it" for me it does not feel right, just an opinion. I think I would end at "see", or maybe you "me" instead of "it". To remind all that it is you that is being primped and paraded, you are not an "it". And I have to say that bitch added a spice that I don't think another word would have invoked. Great read Moonman, sorry I have not been around much, but maybe we can PM soon and catch up. Luv you bunch's Julie D.D.

Moon, This is a great poem. I am floudering through my days, then I come in here, and you are still kicking butt with solid writes. I've truley admired most of your poetic works. wcw

Richard, This was a fun little poem, light on the surface, but really quite deep. You love to throw those little surprises at us, don't you. The word, 'bitch' woke me up. Then I had to read the poem several more times. Yours, Deelilah

Returning for yet another read... I have to agree with Janice *it* is superfluous... to what does *it* refer, specifically? However, Bitch I totally get (it). ;-) ~A

I really do enjoy rhyme and this little verse sings love and care. Just hold me tight - genuine and pure. I must say your title is what captured me. I loved it.

I really like this poem. It is such a true depiction of love. I like the way you can just say it as it is. and at the end, the yearning for love, because we are all human after all.