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There's Hope In Consequence

 There's an archer over hill
perched silently beyond his bow
below, the proposed assassination of the king
and what an honour they've bestowed
"he who killed the tyrant"
word will spread throughout the land
words of the kings demise
at the hands of an unnamed man 
An honourable soul
with a fist full of righteous intent 
with the skill and the bravery 
to end the pestilence and torment 
poised upon baited breath
as the king departs his stone covers
the archer draws back his bow
seeing seething dark colours
awaiting that ideal shot 
he knows timing is everything
he follows the king in his sights
his fingers steady upon the heavy string
the king finally turns to bare his face
it's leathery and quite disgraceful
his vesture of purple and gold 
ludicrous and quite distasteful 
the archer fires
confident as fate descended 
the arrow whistles in a whisper
and kisses its intended
As the kings blood spills
the archer knows it's ended
he fades into the dense forest
back to the arms of those he defended.
— Bosscombat, Aug 29, 2009

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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Bosscombat

I have to say,I really loved it.Too real, pictured every word, It would be a good book actually. Can't say which lines I liked best, I liked them all.Top notch. Excellent read, my Fave so far. From Lyz.
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

Hey lyz Glad u like it :) Thanks again for your flattery Damn those tyrants :p ♣
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Matty

I told you keep writing you will just get better ;) lol ... Its spastic writing on your poem while you sit across from me LMAO ... I still find it bizarre :S ... but anyhooooo I read this in the writing ... so I knew it would be good ... and you never disappoint ;) love and hugz Jayne x x whats for dinner ?? I cooked last night !! pmsl ... bet we get take out "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

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Heya Thanks jayknee We all need a little bit of spastic in our lives And I find you bizzare :p I don't know where'd u get the impression I never disapoint?! just yesterday I stole a young girls lollypops :p I dunno what dinner is to be... Thanks for cook btw. And for the comment and vote ♣
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Didn’t you mean a little

Didn't you mean a little spastic like me pmsl ? ... love love dont tell snake I said that pwease ? (hug) :D:P "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Nice shot!

You oughta try writing it in story form, 'cause I think you will run into same comment as me. Not Really a poem. I really dug the way he waited, wanting the shot so bad, but taking his time. Awesome stuff, Gee
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

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Thanks Gee Im glad you thought it was worth a story... I have a similar idea in a novel im trying my best to write.. Its a little more modern day though I agree its more of a story than a poem and a good marksman knows when to wait and when to shoot. Thanks again ♣
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 9 months ago

Bloody terrific!

and bloody fantastic, really enjoyed the story telling in this one, well actually this is the first one of yours I have read and looking forward to more. Bloody Brilliant!! :)fleur
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

Hey fleur I've heard a lot about you Seren is sitting in my lounge room Telling me what a darling you are haha She says hi btw She also cooked us a wicked baked dinner last night I feel sorry for those who missed out. Anyway! Thaanks heaps for the compliments Glad you liked it Ill be checking out your work now :) ♣
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 9 months ago

There's Hope

This one kept my interest from the beginning to the end I truly enjoyed this write~ _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

Hey Janice Thanks a lot :) Glad you enjoyed it BossCombat
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 9 months ago

Ha! The man who would be

Ha! The man who would be king, long live he! But who might that be? And does everybody live in Australia? lol. ~A
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

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Ahhhhhh *taps side of my nose* You're quite cluey :p And not everyone lives here. But its a semi nice place :p Thanks a heap for the comment :) ♣
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

Heya doc! Nice to see a fresh face :) Glad you liked this one And yeh that's a crazy coincidence Thanks mate! Bosscombat
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orgami

16 years 9 months ago

Roncalles

Where Charlemagne lost a freind Somewhere in history there is a king who died from sitting on the throne England I believe the assasin waiting in the privy I read many books on snipers Francis Pegamagabow from Parry Sound Ontario famous in World War One a young Russian woman in world war two Seventy pound pull i read about the english longbow (maybe way out on this) and I remember Chechesque and his wife being dragged down and shot like dogs thus ending the long regime and Waco Texas and the great fire a terric poem about ideals defence the very thing that America is upholding and upheld with the extraction and elimination of Suddam and the hunt of Osama You write well young man I enjoyed this write
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

why thank you very kindly orgami dear sir glad to see your face again :) also glad u liked this thanks again mate! ♣