Seren

Aug 28, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

The Faery Dance to Heal

Softly she drifts
across our screens,
light as a bird
and sweet as a stream
Huggling a gum tree
part of my home,
Over and ever
to wander and roam
To Dance like a dervish
Beki does fly,
Omi her shadow
flowing right beside
Having hats aplenty
and smiles of love,
Love is her blessing
it flows from above
Loved by us all
from way deep inside,
her words a serrature
to live life with pride
Kind and thoughtful
building us up,
warmth in abundance
overflows her cup
She found courage
throwing off worries,
shadow of sorrow
Lives in memory
But living again
among us now,
floating to meanings
shes touching the clouds

— Seren, Aug 28, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

lyz

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Seren

How is ya? Okay, dear heart?, awesome read, a bit of a melancholy undertone,I don't know, okay, I know this one is for your good friends, but there is something else.I have read it over and aloud. I may be wrong and I'm sorry for that, it is beautiful and heart felt. Thank you for sharing. Lyz.x.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Lyz

I am staying in Mayfield with Boss and Robb its a cloudy day here whats it like over there LOL I had the best sleep and I slept in :O:O omg I never get more than 4 hours sleep !! .... There is a melancholy undertone to this one , Beki has had a few rough spots in her life but she is getting better all the time this was to show her how I see her, I sent it to her 2 days ago and she said she loved how I see her, and made me cry I was so happy she liked it ... thanks for the read and the stars huni ... we should meet up for a coffee I am down here for five days .. Jade is at my house with Bj lol making sure they dont trash the place while I am gone .. she is such a treasure your girl I love her to bits ... much love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

lyz

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Jayne

I did not Know you were still in Newy, I knew Jade was at your house because I rang her. Forgot my password, dickhead I am. When I rang they were all about to play games, don't ask, I never,Ha.Glad to hear you got some rest.I would love to meet for coffee but at the moment I have a few things on, which is a pain in the arse, between birthdays, doctors and going through stuff for the chuck out, plus a few other minor things I am finding it hard to get time for myself. When Kel has his shower, were of to the son and daughter in-laws to take them their present. If I had known Friday, I had the afternoon free. Next time you are here, we will arrange it better and hopefully your visit will be one of pleasure.I also hope they have not trashed the house, but you just get some rest and don't worry about them. I will talk to you later okay.Hi to the guy's, look after her. Love, Lyz.x.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Lyz

Lmao ask jade and Bj how forgetful I am I am a shocker !! lol ... yeah I have to be down here till tuesday maybe wednesday they are doing a procedure on tuesday and it depends on how I go whether i can get home that day or the next ... we can catch up when I am down here next and I will be here for a few weeks , five days a week and go home weekends I am sure you can guess what they are doing then lol no fun but I will have plenty of time to catch up with you ... the boys all said G'day and yup they will take care of me .. LOL though I am cooking a baked dinner for them tonight :P ... you take care hun we will catch up soon ... love and hugz Jayne x x he he Jadey will bash the boys if they play up gotta love her feisty spirit ... girl after my own heart LOL !!! "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

how sweet

this has a magically quality in between the lines, just gorgeous. -diatom shells

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear diatom shells

Thanks heaps for the comment its about our own faerybeki shes a really lovely girl and her little girl is Omi shes been such a good friend to me always with a kind word when things are a bit rough I decided to show her how I see her , I showed it to her first I wanted her okay before I submitted it, shes such a wonderful asset to the site I wanted her to know she is appreciated ... love Jayne x x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

faerybeki

16 years 11 months ago

Jayne!! :) :) You know how I

Jayne!! :) :) You know how I feel about this one babe..so grateful :) With friends like you hon, a girl can't help but try to embrace herself :) It's wonderful to be seen by you Jayne, you're such a dear. I've got this big smile on my face, thanks hon! Hope you're having a great time and the cooking goes down well with the boys, I expect there'll be some beer involved as well eh? ;) You deserve a bit of fun, hope you laugh till your belly aches ;) Much love and BIG hugs Beki xxxx Ps. LOVE the title ;) more love xx

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Beki ,

I do I was so glad you liked it, and without friends like you I would probably be bouncing off the walls of some nuthouse LOL nahhhh not really but you know what I meen ... Your messages of support and love mean so much to me ... LOL it was funny when you mentioned hats I thought mmmmm perfect opening to show her the poem ... so glad I did I have been playing with it for a week or two ... I know you ahve hd some sdness in your life hun and I just wanted you to see how I see you , you are strong and your a beautiful girl I wish you nothing but joy ... They just finished eating they had a baked dinner and BossCombat said two thumbs up and five stars LOL so it must have been alright lol they re on the bourbons ....Soooo should be interesting I will take pictures and post them tomorrow LMAO oh dear I might be in trouble tomorrow :O damn aint that a shame he he he I cant drink but i can watch and laugh :P ... Love and hugz Jayne x x I am just glad you liked it ((((hug)))) "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall"

docmaverick

16 years 10 months ago

I really liked the theme....

...but you seem to have abandoned your rhyme scheme in the 3rd and 8th stanzas, and that's not like you. Then, in the 7th stanza...you decide on rhyming "life", with the word, "life". But, like I said....I liked your theme... "Write on"! sincerely, @{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Doc

I am away from home at the moment wasn't looking when I put the poems on my laptop to go away , and put the wrong edit on, I just noticed when you made your comment , I fixed it as best I can LOL I will be home on wednesday will see what difference there is ... take care thanks so much for the read and the heads up LOL noone else had mentioned it so I had missed it ... LOL anyhooooo thankkkkkkk youuuuuuuuuuuu doc your a legend ... Love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

mantiscepter

16 years 10 months ago

Healing

YOUR MORNING IS MY NIGHT. really well written jayne, {Over and Ever To Wander And Roam] Such wonderful" verse". Marvelous. Mantiscepter

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Thank you Mantis

Yes my night is your morning lol and vice versa , I am so glad you liked this one , I didnt realise till doc above you mentioned something that I had submitted the wrong edit , LOL I had a blonde moment ... take care hope your sleeping well .. Love and hugz Jayne x x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

what can i say

Breathtaking!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Love, Greeneyes

hugo la rosa

16 years 10 months ago

“Love is her blessing it

"Love is her blessing it flows from above", I like this lines, and they are really the main cause of Beki's healing. Healing the mind and heart is what motivates us, human beings, in our search for true happiness. Great write, Seren, Regards, Hugo

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Hugo

Dont know why but I didn't get an email for your comment so I am sorry for the delay in the reply ... thanks for the beautiful message shes a lovely girl i just wanted ther to know shes a shining light for all of us , shes a beautiful young woman and I am proud to know her , love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

greeneyes

16 years ago

wow

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Elizabeth

This is a fav of mine as well I am so happy you liked it love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

mantiscepter

16 years ago

The shadow

Lovely write Seren I very much enjoyed the story line and it had a nice flow to it, I do notice when you use words that are a part of your home there. just wonderful. Love John

Seren

16 years ago

Dear John

This is a very old write but it needs an edit ... I will do one over the next few days ... thanks for going back so far I appreciate the read and the comment love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

magics02

16 years ago

Just grand my lady

Old one but new one to me and it sure takes the cake (cookies too) Really nice aussie lady. Enjoyed it immensely Love at ya gal Mona xoox

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Mona

This one was for a friend here at Neopoet thanks for going back so far and for the read its really appreciated ... love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

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