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The Child You See

 Just throwing a rock.
to watch it splash.
with" it's rippling movements,
on the river; that clash.

to dirt wall banks.
where" they fade at end,
in light moving swells
giving face:thoughts mend.

relaxing to gaze at.
to walk along side.
followed: by many reflections,
that quietly ride.

seeing yourself .
glimpse,  after glimpse.
making "silly expressions,
strutting tall" with a limp.

a feeling of goodness .
fresh; so free.
as memories; return you
to this child" you see.

lost" deep within us.
hidden in years.
brought now" to surface.
by pleasures" smiling tears.
— mantiscepter, Aug 28, 2009

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lyz

16 years 11 months ago

hi

I loved the read.Beautiful words and memories. Loved the fourth verse. Thanks for the memories. Lyz.
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DarkAngelFrm94

16 years 11 months ago

its awsum as

It made me think and it sounds realy gd I liked it alot. it had so much truth to it and was lovely to read.
Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Mantis

This is just beautiful my friend what more can I say ... love and hugz Jayne .. "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall"
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Mantiscepter...

I feel it is a good thing that we can never escape the child within... our innocence of nature and its outcome. loved this metaphoric glimpse within... smiling! Richard
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evin

16 years 11 months ago

Hello

I really liked this. Great imagery which took me back to my youth. Good work. Kevin

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