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seabhac
seabhac
Aug 27, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Middle Child

  Never firstNever LastMidwayNot a winnerNot a looserMediocreSister ofBrother ofNon identityCompared toBetween twoToo muchNever enoughRemember the middle childLove the middle child 
— seabhac, Aug 27, 2009

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press

16 years 9 months ago

hey

This was a very good poem , different to the main stream of poetry we poets fall back on. I always say that [ less is more ] . Only one comment [ If I may] .I would add the word midway with Mediocre. Only to link the phrase together with this [ Remember the middle child ]. I am mediocre to ,so I am still learning . I hope this was helpful LOV2U PRESS
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 9 months ago

thank you press

Thank you for taking the time to read this ...you have been very observent in my dilemma on that word...would she think I thought of her as Mediocre by the use of the single neon bright word ( it now glows at me when I look at the poem) Midway is a softer introductio to the word, a curving of its surface. This is all very new to me and I am learning so much from Neo and the friends who take the time to comment. The knock on association of words together was never conciously seen by me before but it almost as if I can see them physically now, jostling for place. A valuable lesson hopefully retained. I am becomming a little braver by the encouragement of the good people on Neo. I looked at your work as my way to know the context of a comment and I liked your freedom in your words, your fearlessness. I am glad you introduced yourself and you work to me and I look forward to following and learning from your writings. Liz
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 9 months ago

Hi Seabhac...

I liked your poem too, my sister(the middle child) has always said she felt the middle child syndrome, but there were five of us. looser... loser I would scratch the "midway, mediocre" altogether, and replace it with something like... in the middle of sister of brother of merely a suggestion, although we are all mediocre at best, most don't want to hear it, and most certainly don't want to read it, especially from Mom. like I said it is only a suggestion, I like your honesty in your writes... a refreshing quality that not everyone possesses. Richard
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 9 months ago

good suggestion

I played wiht the suggestion and it became clearer to me why I had used that word Mediocre in the first place and it was linked to a comment she had made to me many years ago about when you are "bad" at school at do something positive you get greatly praised , when you are exceptionally bright at school they praise you but the inbetweeners get nothing they are just mediochre...the word had actually come from her...thanks for raising that memory as I now can use the word within as her word and a better truth for empathising with her.It was not my view of her but her view of how it was.By the way she is the "middle child of 7. Thanks as always for your comments Liz
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 9 months ago

Seven...

oh my that is a lot of diapers... and all that goes along with the raising of children... my hat is off to you! Thank you for your response, I am always glad when someone makes me question the reasons I have used a particular word too, love it when I find it is the right word for the situation... thank you, I believe you are right as rain here with your choice of words. Richard
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Liz

This is awesome I know many middle children i am the baby of my family, and of allll the grandkids lol ... so I dont know what its like and its funny but my middle two are the ones that are the ones doing really well its my oldest and youngest that are my battlers , I really loved this thought huni you made me think I love it when things reflect in me ... love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 9 months ago

how do you find time

Your flow of poetry is tidal at the moment , I can hardly get the time to reflect on one and there is another one battling for the "better " place than the last . Wow I am delighted that you can find the time to comment ...thanks , I do appreciate it. Liz