Dream a Little.

On wings of Pegasus you fly to me,
In dream's of slumber, my fantasy.
With arms entwined our lips meet,
The taste of honey amber sweet.

Dream a little dream my love,
Beneath stars and moon above.

I am your unicorn with horn of gold,
You are my pegasus let your wings unfold.
Entwine with me forever more,
On distant land beside seashore.

Dream a little dream my love,
Under the black velvet sky above.

Before sunrise and eyes awake,
Dream of me and the love we make.
Dream a little just until dawn,
For in a moment all will be gone.

Dream a little and be my fantasy,
Before I wake to reality.

— lyz, Aug 26, 2009

Critiques

Barbara Writes

16 years 11 months ago

Lyz

Beautiful images Of love he on the wings of Pegasus and you the unicorn with the gold horn beside the sea shore of a distant land is really good. the only thing I would suggest is this stanza: "Dream a little dream my love, Under the black velvet sky above. It stumbles just a little otherwise it is perfect. A fairy tale love story, I tried to write this style before as I really like it, but I stink at it drawing a block. I do enjoy yours. It is easy to read like a child's story book ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

lyz

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Barbara

Glad you liked it and thanks for the comment. I KNOW you could write this sort of stuff, it is in all of us. You express your words so beautiful that I know you could. Go on, Give it ago. This was written as a lovey, flirty poem for the hubby, years ago, due to the fact I am mad about Pegasus and Unicorns. Thanks,from Lyz.

Barbara Writes

16 years 11 months ago

Lyz

I have tried my hand at this and I get stuck in thoughts and I just don't like what I write and discard it. I will search my heart and find one that I am mad about as you are about Pegasus and Unicorns lol. I must first find someone to write to for lol. maybe why I couldn't write it before lol. thanks for the encouragement I'm sure it will come sooner or later as all my writing style came when I least expect it to. Again a beautiful love poem. a vision of such elegant fantasy from that of true love. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Lyz

You had me with the unicorns and then topped it off with pegasus LOL wow I love this one its my new favourite of yours I am a sucker for fantasy writes ... love and hugz Jayne ... "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

lyz

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Seren

Glad you enjoyed it. To tell you the truth, the original was a bit more provocative,so I tried hard to clean it up.Lol. Oh to be young and in love, again, instead of old and cold.Lol. Thanks for your help with things, do you know that I only, today, Realized how to fix up Egyptian Past. It's like, Doh. Never mind, I think I have gotten the hang of things.Now get back to writing and give me back my Elfin smile. Lyz.x

sweetspirit

16 years 11 months ago

Love luv it!!!

I think you just post the orignal the way you intended and just mark it *adult* this is too beautiful to be censored. Fav lines are: On wings of Pegasus you fly to me, In dream’s of slumber, my fantasy. With arms entwined our lips meet, The taste of honey amber sweet. Jen

lyz

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Jen.

Sorry I have not got back to you, this computer is not long for this world, I think, having lots of trouble. Thank you for your lovely comment and congrats on spotlight.If I could write like you, I would honestly write a book. I love your work.Before I got ill, I had written a couple of short stories and attempted a sultry type of love story, never finished it but some read what I had, and waited for me to continue so they could find out what happened next. Could not get into it any more, but your flair, makes me want to read more, seriously,you should think about it. Thanks,and sorry for the rave. Lyz.x.

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