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SAKTHEEE2007
Aug 26, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Where is the Light?

  Where is the light?

 


He is searching the light in the dark

Though his path is task and hard

He believes the light will reduce his stress

He prays his God to help and bless

 

Blindness there in the corner

He never worried about this dark

He believes that his vision will help him

He prays to God for his sight

 

God  in the sky came down  and

helped the blind to get back his eyes

First has cursed the God as a merciless stone

Second has praised His grace is great

 

Who are you my man?  in the above lines.

He is always right to help to all in their needs.

It will come in time neither sooner nor later

Not to curse Him or bless

 No where is He, only in your soul 

 

 


— SAKTHEEE2007, Aug 26, 2009

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

hello

You bring up a good question for which each as individuals must answer for themselves. A good poem, very deep. Always, Cat
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

I see the light....

I like your theme a lot Sakkkkkkk, but think you might make a few changes to even the flow. My suggestions if I may: [1] Though his path a task, and hard [2] Blindness there in the corner [3]He prays to God for his sight [4]No where is he, only in your soul Try changing these lines to something like these changes. They are not set in concrete, but you could use them as a guideline. I would not presume to say that this is the only way to do these lines, they are only suggestions. Your friend in poetry, Gee
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SAKTHEEE2007

16 years 9 months ago

Thanks Gee

Thank you very much for your suggestions i have made it now it is new and nice than before saktheee
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Another star for you,

I think it flows very well now, and I am giving you another star. I think you could have come up with equally as good lines as I. You might want to change them a little later, but I like it better. Your message is clearer, it speaks loudly. Faith is not forgiving, but rather a hard task-maker. Your friend in poetry, Gee