Seren

Aug 24, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Colour My World Neo-n

A spiritual home
to fly,be free
I'm ever to roam
in words with glee

Thumping heads
and clashing swords,
over a simple thing
as words

Letters our code
to other realms,
talking a leap
to stand at the helm

We Colour our worlds
in rainbows bright,
and sing of love
in shining light

I beguile the sea
to love the moon,
by listing his head
across the dunes

Loved and adored
are you all,
for every last wish
in warm loving word's

Finding a home
among the code,
dreaming and living
the written word

I wove a unicorn
through the night
I rode to the moon
to my great delight

All this I did
in my head,
and alive in word
We'll never be dead

— Seren, Aug 24, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

hugo la rosa

16 years 11 months ago

Great poem. I like

Great poem. I like it! Always on the safe side of good literature and excellent choice of words. Hugo

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

I am so glad you liked it,Was just a bit of fun I am shocked at the response to this one ...Thank YOU for your kind words,I am sitting here smiling like a loon again ... love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

Neo-Colored World

Neo-Colored world, oh gosh! Reading your work is so like putting on 3-D glasses and watching a movie. I love your perspective. "Letters our code to other realms, [talking] a leap to stand at the helm". If it wasn't meant to be talking, but was to be [taking], I can see it both ways. I guess I will have to accumulate some more aggression now, because I just couldn't go right out and start killing after reading all the nice,sweet stuff that you, Org, and Ann have written. I guess that going school clothes shopping for Jason will do it. There is bound to be a lot of aggravation there. [Crowds, traffic, and I'm sure some rude people.] LOL Glad to see you are feeling well enough to write some [Icky sweet stuff] LOL I will have to put some salt on my brow to drip in my eyes and maybe get some heart-burn from fast-food before I can write of murder. L & Hugz, Gee

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

LOL Dear Sir Geee

Dear Gee , I cracked up laughing at your comment !! going looking for agro ??? hahaha and here I am hiding from it, just joking !! School clothes shopping? oOoOooOoOoooOo you will find the argo your searching for he he he :P Its meant to be talking, talking a leap, I dont know what made me think of that line,It just fell out of my head as most of these lines do ... My dear friend thank you so much for your comment ((((((((((((((((hug))))))))))) love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Bosscombat

16 years 11 months ago

:)

u already know i like this one 5 stars :) ♣

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Matty !!!!

Well I hope you like it you read it before anyone did,LOL and thanks for the pick up on my mistake last night !! Thanks for catching that one .. much love and hugz Jayne x x ... I will be off the bus at 9.30 in the morning will be around at yours round lunch :) wooooot :P "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Rett

16 years 11 months ago

Jayne

This is delightful. It has elements of truth presented in a fun and happy format and with your usual aplomb! Well done! Respectfully, Rett: "When I was born I was so surprised I didn't talk for a year and a half." Gracie Allen

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Rett

I am glad you mentioned the elments of truth , because I felt I wouldnt be true to myself if I didnt weave a little reality in this one for people to relate to, thank you so much for you comment , I am so stoked you liked it !!! Love and hugz Jayne "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

lyz

16 years 11 months ago

Loved it

Enjoyed,Loved it. Lyz.x

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Lyz

Thank you so much for your comment I am glad you loved it :D and tell jade will be in Newcastle for the day tomorrow ;) love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

mantiscepter

16 years 11 months ago

Neon Moon

A rainbow of delicious words,coloring my screen. a well written piece . love the adaptations" words" grate choice. Nice ride, [WoW] Mantiscepter

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Hello Mantis

Thank you for your continued support will be round tonight having a read and making few comments will see what you have for me tonight !! Glad you enjoyed the ride Love and hugz Jayne x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

leonard daranjo

16 years 11 months ago

Jayne - You seem to inhabit a permanent niche

in the spot light. Congratulations - not just for being there but for your many visits. Beautiful play on words; Nice interweaving of surreal and fun images. I enjoyed it. Leonard

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Leonard

The laws of gravity are similar to writing what goes up must come down, and it is nice to be appreciated and I loved everyones reaction though I didn't expect it , Thank you for your read and continued support your a wonderful writer I am awed everytime I read a new one of yours ! take care Regards Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Dearest Jayne

Congratulations on making the spotlight with this poem. I love that it is playful and light hearted. My favorite lines are: We Colour our worlds in rainbows bright, and sing of love in shining light I beguile the sea to love the moon, by listing his head across the dunes love, Cat

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dearest Cat

I thought you might like those lines , the idea of hanging the moons face across the dunes to lure the sea in(tide in) lol just tickled me and I knew you would love it, thanks for your always kind comments your a great friend ... Talk to you real soon (hug) love Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

bjp

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe,

I like the sentiments. There is a wonderfulness to this place of the Tap-Tap (to paraphrase Caitlin). There is an ear listening, an eye straining to see past the curve of the horizon. Love Brian

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Brian

Most times I close my eyes and its all in my head, all these pictures, I dream In colour too apparently thats odd lol ...anyway thanks for taking the time to read this one it was just a bit of fun , I was shocked everyone liked it so much but am as always appreciative .. (hugz) hope your both well ?and had a good visit, will catch up when I get back from a few days at Bosscombats house, or if the boys get drunk ? now thats a possibility , ... Love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

evin

16 years 11 months ago

Enjoyed

I really enjoyed this and the first verse being my favorite part of the poem. (K)evin

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Kevin ,

Thanks for your comment and that first stanza was straight from my heart this is a great place, there is good and bad in everything I like to focus on the good if that makes me a faery so be it lmao ... but I have a sense of humour as well .. ;) take care kind regards Jayne :) "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall"

xena465

16 years 5 months ago

Brilliant Seren. You always

Brilliant Seren. You always have a nack of showing us visions of nature and who we truly want to be...Love it. Rosina xena465

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