doorman

Aug 24, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Midnight prayer

Brilliant rays of some moon

Silhouette a relentless, spinning loom

Black disarray on my pillow poured

Unknowingly nurtured,- or spoiled

Fossils, gods and politicians

Conference devoid of deliverance

The clink of a thought stirs a nerve

A waking world ambiguously curbed

Let these notions pass me by

The tangle of this darken twine

I am grey rock, a gosling's down

Announced into a thoughtless plan

— doorman, Aug 24, 2009

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Country/Region: NOR

Critiques

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Espen ...

Breathlessly brilliant ... what can I say I loved every line but those last two lines ? incredible ... loved it ... Love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

doorman

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Jayne

I post, revise a little, a few seconds go by,- and there you are! Thanks again for keeping an eye on my words. Your support is highly appreciated. Yours, Espen.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

LOL sorry

Sorry fired too early LOL I only just signed back in and went to stream ... there you where top poem ... lovely poem though it's my new favourite of yours ... Regards jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

doorman

16 years 11 months ago

Jayne

Trigger-happy, eh? No worries, Jayne. I'm happy as a clam. Yours, Espen.

lyz

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Doorman

Such a passionate write, I enjoyed reading and in your thoughts, is a plan. Well done. Love Lyz. XX

doorman

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Lyz

Didn't get to thank you for your comment, until now. I've been to the mountains devoid of electric gadgets and internet. Thank you for reading the prayer, I'm glad you liked it. Yours, Espen

ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

midnight prayer

enda, patrick collins. hi this really works for me and i luv the ending fav line " i am grey rock ,a gosling's down a fine write indeed

doorman

16 years 10 months ago

Hi pat,Remember being quite

Hi pat, Remember being quite happy with that line, too. Sort of saved the write I felt. Thanks for reading, All the best, Espen

ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

enda, patrick collins.

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