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mugsy
Aug 21, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

The White Desert


I've suffered your white winds
Where snow blows like sand
And nothing grows
Except the white dunes
Across the land
Even felt your icy kiss
on Earlobes and toes
You spared nothing
Not even my
Overextended nose
Which I dared invest
In your frosty business....

 
— mugsy, Aug 21, 2009
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Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Mugsy

This is a very clever write and its fresh ... I think you have something with this one ... and I loved those last lines You spared nothing Not even my Overextended nose Which I dared invest In your frosty business…. reallly strong end I like very much ...regards Jayne :) "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

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