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Bosscombat
Aug 21, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Whatever The Cost

Failure, failures
neglecting your labours
delegate to your minions
coz' they owe you favours

I can see your sly eyes
your undignified grin
shed your shiny skin
coz' this ones all bruised
faintly tainted
in blacks and blues

Option, options
sell your organs at auction
put your sad, sick children
all up for adoption

I can see your sly eyes
darting back darting forth
flaunting maximum force
be the first to break the ice
and slice up your arm
to receive the device

Picture, pictures
stop flickin the switches
i see you fingering your riches
scratching your britches
(but not coz it itches)

I can see your sly eyes
although the left one twitches
you know as well as i do
as soon as the new moons due
you will shoot through
and leave nothing but the imprint
of you fucking size 10 shoes.
— Bosscombat, Aug 21, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Matt

This could be sung to a rap beat its got a rhythm all through it the tempo is amazing ... we gotta do this one to music !! LOL next week hurry up !!(hug) another awesome write hun you gotta pick that pen up more often ... you got something my brother ... love you Jayneeeee x x x I love this verse its powerful and says a lot for me .. says it all when people are actually doing this ... Option, options sell your organs at auction put your sad, sick children all up for adoption "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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CyberSpace

16 years 9 months ago

Btw I dont have stars yet I

Btw I dont have stars yet I am on probation .. LOL ..Sorry Bro ripped off
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bjp

16 years 9 months ago

Dear BossCombat

Olya says she is prepared to like everything you write (but she is now planning on being quoted verbatim by me, so this may be playing to the audience a tad). (Olya guffufs) She says it is not the same old same old unicorn stuff. "His sludge hammer ways are refreshing," she says. "This piece has more of a heart beat rhythm - making us children of the womb. There are a number of great images packed into the poem." To me, it sounds like a poem about IV drug use, but subtly put. We like it. Brian (also reporting for Olya)
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

I thank you both, deeply! Im glad you both like it IV drug use....very interesting I wouldn't have picked it but im glad you did. Olya, im very flattered :) What is a sludge hammer... I like the sound of it though haha. ♣
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bjp

16 years 9 months ago

Dear BossCombat,

Yes, I see your point. Should have been sledgehammer. Brian
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Hi

Seren was right, you do have talent. I really enjoyed this one, and yes you could Rap it. Thanks for the awesome read and music to my ears. Lyz.
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

Thanks Lyz I've heard a lot about your work too Seren gives me a big ego :p And youre too kind ♣