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The Sun

Today I touched; soft white clouds
they sprayed my face; voices echoed loud.
beneath my visions, they soared to join ;
each one in darkness, blocked this void.
along trails that lead us, to speechless sights
I followed in the hours,late" by misty light.
beauty abounded, with turning; a course.
bringing to senses; a fulness; a force.
then conquered I stood. At the peak of it's reach.
staring down; through these clouds, eyes beseech.
bringing sights picturesque.not lost to time
for they filled with delight;  these eyes this mind
A yell for old times sake, that roared"  many miles.
with an ending to venture; that would make many smile...
— mantiscepter, Aug 21, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Mantis

I adored this one, taking a look down at those memories , I must try that from the clouds sometime , lol I loved this one friend ... the whispy feel of floating carried through the whole poem ... well done ... Love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

The Sun

Thanks for your continuing support,and lovely comments, Miss jayne. I've been gone for walk about, for awhile; nice to get back to fantasy !! Hope I did not , offend you with the fairy dust re-marks I made. last I wrote. If it did, I am truly sorry. re-marks from an other person, seemed to think I may Have...? thanks again. Mantiscepter
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Mantis

I am truely a woman with my head in the clouds, and sometimes ? when I am there talk the faeries out of their dust lol And I am not sure what comment you mean I had a look couldnt see it, but if you say I am sprinkling faery dust maybe I am LOL I love faeries and wizards etc ...So would never EVER take offence to a comment such as yours its a compliment in my book ... hope your dreaming sweet dreams up there , and worry not I dont ever take offence easy (hug) love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

a sprinkling

So happy to hear back from you, and I am happy to know my comments did not even leave an image of discontent. was all with love and respect. Thanks. Jayne : Mantiscepter
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Mantiscepter

Always a pleasure, I loved this. The thinks we think, thoughts not lost, just revised, and the smiles u bring. Loved the read, love the new pic. Full of surprises u r. Such nice ones at that. Love Lyz XX
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

Sunny

It's always sunny, when I hear from you. happy to see you bumped into this poem. like an old friend it, kinda gives me a subtle release time to sit back and reflect. hope it was good for you. as always. Mantiscepter