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i want to write a love poem (rewritten with Weirdelf's loving pen)

I want to write a love poem


I'm not carrying any banner,
just holding myself up--
poorer than I was,
more hungry for the world
you promised,
and now
instead of a love poem to you,
my dear Mr. President
of the boyish charms and smiling graces,
I'm afraid I'm here to remind you:
you've forgotten to whom
you spoke these words...

"YES, we can."

NOT to the politicians!
NOT to the generals!
NOT to the bureaucrats!

...but to the common folk who know
what it means to live the truth
at the bottom of the food chain,

you have forgotten how colour plays out
in the light,
you have forgotten that winds of change come with
the word "NO".  "I will fight no more forever."
for sticks and stones, bullets and bombs maim and kill,
when there is no one who dares (or is left)
to speak the truth...

you have forgotten Viet Nam, Iraq, Palestine, and Antietam, Nagasaki
and you will burden your children's children with the
wages of war in Afhanistan,

you promised
being black
you promised
being rich

we still are
we still are
we still can't pay for pain or illness
we still can't move without buying
we still can't always eat

come home to us
even if our need is selfish
come home to us
Mr. President

can't you see the world is slipping
away, heart=sick, restless, tattered-trouserd?

Winter's coming and the blue=needle of death waits for
the next faltering step.





— Kailashana, Aug 20, 2009

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Diatom Shells

16 years 9 months ago

wow...

i think you have something here very sad and firm. we need to remind those that a promise should be kept with high standards to the highest standard. i feel the same way in this work of yours. i decided to turn off the tv forever i canceled all shows and i havent watched tv for six months or more and our financial life has climbed. we listen too much to biased news that if we would just draw our own conclusions things would be a lot better but we also need our president to live up to the hype he has created for himself or he will not be seeing another term.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Anna

Your poem is right on the pulse of our nation. I think you ought to send it to Mr. Obama. It couldn't hurt, and might actually help. You never know until you try. Good luck. Always, Cat
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 9 months ago

Anna

~~~~~~~~Not a word to improve on this gem~~~~~~~ ____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 9 months ago

Thank you for your thoughts

Thank you for your thoughts & words ladies. I'll let you know what happened tomorrow. Hugs to all. Wish I didn't have to write this type of prose/poetry. I'd love to find a lover and run away with him to an island where all I could do is write real love poetry and talk about my mouth on various parts of his anatomy. Alas. It's not to be. Shit. ~A "If you have come to help me, you are wasting your time. But if you have come because your liberation is wound up in mine, then let us work together." Aboriginal Activist Group, Queensland, 1970's
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Anna ...

WOW ... I got the privelage to read both versions ...For some reason I posted here last night and its not here ... But I have to say I love both versions same poem from different hemipheres ... but brilliant write's from you both love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
LD

leonard daranjo

16 years 9 months ago

Brilliant write Ana and challenging too!!!

I don't think I can ever recall a time when I saw promises translated into action. The President does indeed have his work cut out in order to transpose the "Yes we can" into "Yes it is being done and it is plain for all to see" These lines: Winter’s coming and the blue=needle of death waits for the next faltering step. wrap up your sentiment well Leonard
DC

Darby Cain

16 years 9 months ago

great read

i enjoyed this poem emencly>
M

Marie-I-Be

16 years 9 months ago

Obama

To take President Obama's words literally and to comprehend them is to understand and appreciate the man, not to put unsaid words in his mouth and wrongful blame in his pocket. In my opinion, he is the smartest, most caring, most creative, most fair (to everyone), most truthful leader this country has ever had the great fortune to elect into office. If I could choose the right words to do him justice, I would write a poem of gratitude and send it to him. I do easily love him with no restriction. I have never felt more hopeful about my future. Beautiful man with a lucid mind and generous heart. I wish he could have a third term.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 9 months ago

When the hype was on for him

When the hype was on for him to be elected...I said, "we'll see". When he was elected, and the hype was gung ho, I said, "we'll see". Now I'm seeing, and I see that he is one of the better ones... his heart most likely is in the right place and being a politician he can't be a maverick, we all know that...that's not how the game is played. There is, however, as in every one's life, "room for improvement". And that, imo, doesn't detract from any one of us. ~A "In peace sons bury fathers, but war violates the order of nature, and fathers bury sons." ~ Herodotus